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Onuha, your essay has a tendency to get lost in the narration of your plans should you not get the scholarship. There are a lot of unnecessary references and content that steal away from the true meaning of your essay response. It would be best if you simply focus the essay on the direct response for the prompt. The following parts are the essential components of your proper response:
If I'm not awarded, I will have to continue to offer my services...skill for Graphic Designing.
I am very hard working person who doesn't take failure for an option and never gives up. I always tend to meet up with my career goals in the future.My plans in the next four years , if I am unable to win this scholarship will be to...
The answer you have to give them has to be clear and to the point. The reviewer doesn't really have the time to sort through all of the filler information that you provide. You are not being asked to plead your case in this essay. You are just being asked to provide your plans for the next 4 years should you not get the scholarship. Everything else that you mentioned is unnecessary and only takes the focus of the reviewer away from your 4 year plan. It only requires a 2 paragraph response.