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Becoming a MusicianDescribe, in less than 300 words, an exceptional achievement that highlights your academic and CCA interests that would be of value to the University community.
Becoming a Musician Is not just the biggest Accomplishment I have achieved but also the one which has satisfied me the most. As a teenager, I couldn't afford music classes easily, neither have contacts between my family or friends; all I got was this passionate desire. That's why I took it as a Challenge; teaching myself about electronic music till the point I could make my own songs.
Being Self-Taught and committed led me to raise a career as a Musician and an Entrepreneur. I used all the tools I learned in school and life about researching and getting knowledge, it took me months to learn the basic (I'm still learning), but it was extremely worthy, this goal brought a lot of gratifying experiences into my life: reaching more than 20.000 plays worldwide, being on stage at my prom party, getting my music into Spotify and other music stores, creating my own merchandising and selling it in entrepreneur exhibitions, designing my webpage; just the fact of knowing that I had more than 10 songs was fabulous. Those acts intensified the love I had for music, plus help me to see it from a new perspective as I develop administration skills when managing all the aspects of my career.
Nowadays I think that music is the bridge to a better culture, and I want to spread that message to the world through my future label, to change the way we think about music, to turn it into a lifestyle, a way to improve as human beings, Either Through Music Festivals, Lyrics or dynamic activities in social spaces like Campus; also want to teach people that they can become whatever they want, even if they don't have any sort of help, just by beating their minds and their limits.