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The challenge of leadership is to be strong, but not rude; be kind, but not weak...


Mazenjamalsalah 2 / 5  
Oct 30, 2017   #1
Applying for the Chevening Schoolarship and would really appreciate you help with my answer to the question.

leadership concept



"The challenge of leadership is to be strong, but not rude; be kind, but not weak; be bold, but not bully; be thoughtful, but not lazy; be humble, but not timid; be proud, but not arrogant; have a humor but without folly."

A concept that took me years to digest and implant properly. It all started in my early school years when I was selected to be the main presenter in the school broadcast; choosing topics and assigning tasks to the rest of the team. Back then, I thought that moderating a team is what leadership is all about.

Years after as undergraduate, I was a member of the college student union. Typically, a freshman student shouldn't be leading or influencing older and more senior members. But I couldn't disagree more because moving an entire group of individuals toward a singular goal is all about effective communication and clear vision of what needs to be accomplished. Through both I was nominated by me team members to lead the team to organize the closing event of the student union activities for that year.

The success of the event earned me a positon as the head of the organizing committee the year after. We organized one the most successful Employment fairs conducted in our college. Leading my team to attract 1K student from all over Egypt in addition to signing more than 15 multinational pharmaceutical company to be an event sponsor.

I was also the leader of many scientific projects during my coursework, where I distributed duties and was responsible for making the presentations of the projects for my team.

After graduation, my role as member of student union didn't end. I was prestigiously rewarded to be member of student union advisory board. I kept being on close touch to the union. Being a part of every year "Welcome and Orientation event" for the newcomers. Advising undergraduate student and offer continuous guidance on how they should utilize their capabilities and select the best fitting major and career goals according to their aspiration and traits. A responsibility that actually gives me the chance to influence student lives.

As a Nestle employee and member of the brand team. I was assigned to lead a task force team out of five employees to conduct a market research project called "Competition genotype "studying the impact of country economic status on competition marketing strategies.

I also work as an educational volunteer in 57357 "Children's Cancer Hospital", in which I tutor children successfully cured from cancer but as a result of their sickness they quit the school. The volunteering experience makes me connect with children and helping them overcoming their educational struggles and even influencing their social lives by increasing their confidence and self-esteem. I took part of many campaigns that is offering help to the poor and increasing people's health awareness in many regions.
Hiwi_Life 10 / 31 7  
Oct 30, 2017   #2
@Mazenjamalsalah

Hi, you can exclude the first 5 paragraphs and focus on the last three paragraphs composed of tasks you have done after graduation. From those select one or two best accomplishments and discuss it with example. I think it will help your essay.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4770  
Oct 30, 2017   #3
Mazen, your overall essay is useless. It doesn't respond at all to the prompt requirements because of the academic focus of your response. Let me tell you this, the minute you submit an essay that does not properly respond to the prompt requirement, you are automatically disqualified from the scholarship consideration. You will not get a second chance, even if you wrote 4 essays. Your first essay will automatically disqualify you. Therefore, when the prompt requires you to prove your leadership and influencing skills in a professional setting, that is exactly what you have to do. That said, the only part of this essay that could possibly be used to write a new, more prompt responsive essay is the portion that is only a 2 liner in this essay. The one that deals with your work as a member of the Nestle brand team. However, I do not really sense a true leadership and influencing drive in that part. You only wrote one line about it when it is the only proper reference to the prompt in the essay. So go back. Delete this whole essay. Write a new one that focuses on your leadership and influencing participation as part of the Nestle team. The only problem is, if you were not the Team Leader, you might not be able to provide supporting evidence of such in the essay.


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