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I am a cheerful, fun-loving, proactive, and goal-oriented person. SELF-INTRODUCTION


jangppapunk 1 / -  
Mar 9, 2015   #1
Your course of life, your view of life, study background, your hopes & wishes, etc
o Your education and work experience, etc., in relation to the KGSP program
o Your motivations for applying for this program
o Reason for study in Korea

I am a cheerful, fun-loving, proactive, and goal-oriented person. People know me by the nickname "Honey" and even though I am not as sweet as my name sound, I'm the kind of person people can easily talk with. I believe that life does not give you challenges that you cannot overcome. We much grab every opportunity to improve ourselves and in turn be of help to others.

I was born the eldest child of a low-middle class family in a province near Metro Manila. My mother is public school teacher and my father is an employee at a biscuit factory. Sometimes, our needs would be way beyond our means. Back in elementary school, I recalled a time when I couldn't go to a school field trip because my parents cannot afford it. Our family's difficult financial situation did not stop me from being an excellent student.

Rather, it was my inspiration to strive hard and make the most out of the education that my parents painstakingly provided for me. I was consistently in the top of our class, joining and winning competitions. I graduated elementary school as class valedictorian and was accepted into a specialized science high school, Philippine Science High School.

It was then that I have become more independent and self-reliant. I had to live in the dormitory inside the campus because it was too far from our house. I managed my own finances from the stipends that our school gives to indigent students. My goal then to be accepted in a university, hopefully through a scholarship so that I can help my parents.

With the dream of becoming a doctor, I entered the University of the Philippines - Intarmed Program. It was during this time that I became firm in my goal of becoming a doctor and to eventually specialize in the field of Orthopedics. During my internship year, I had a 2-month rotation in the Philippine General Hospital - Department of Orthopedics. I was able to assist in surgeries, go to outpatient clinics and attend section conferences. This experience reinforced my passion for the subject and also enlightened me on the need for more research especially in the growing fields of musculoskeletal tumors and biomaterials.

I want to apply for the KGSP because I want to further my knowledge in the field of Orthopedic Surgery and to be able to experience a research-friendly environment which I did not have during medical school. Korea has always been known for various technological advancements and through my search, I have seen a lot of outstanding professors who are leaders in their own fields. I also want to be have a more extensive to the Korean health system which is much different from our country's health system. For one, the Philippines does not have a national health insurance system. Hence, most of the health expenditures are out-of-pocket and even the healthcare providers are not able to provide the ideal treatment at times. During one of my trips to Korea, I was able to look around Kyungpook National University Hospital and there I saw differences not just in the health system but also in the technology for medical informatics, the surgical instruments and the quality of care given to patients even in public hospitals. I can envision myself working in such a holistic environment wherein the quality of care is not limited by the financial difficulties of the hospital and the growth of medical doctors in terms of research and development is not limited by sheer volume of patients that they have to handle every single day.

There's a term called Koreanophile, which the urban dictionary defines it as "a person that is obsessed with everything Korea." I believe that it would be the perfect term to describe me. I started knowing about Korean culture from watching Korean dramas since I was in 3nd year high school but it was only in 2010 that I decided to learn the language. I was in medical school then, and even if I wanted to attend Korean classes, my school and study schedule was too tight so I had to resort to self-study. I worked as an online English tutor to help my parents and through that I also earned money to have my first trip to Korea. After that trip, I fell more and more in love with Korea. I love the vibrant culture and the how those colorful traditions are passed down to generations. Despite globalization, the beauty of nature is preserved. The transportation system is so organized and efficient. Unfortunately, during that trip, my toe was caught under the bus door. Some policemen and passers-by gave me first aid treatment and helped me get to my next destination. Even if they struggled to talk to me in English, they gave me all the assistance they could even if I was just a stranger. Of course, one of the reasons why I love Korea is the food. I consider myself lucky that even before coming to Korea, I love spicy food. During my one-month stay in Daegu (my second time in Korea), I had no problems adjusting to the food and I even developed a craving for kimchi.

I want to take this once-in-a-lifetime opportunity to be trained in a respectable institution in Korea. I believe that this training will be very beneficial to my future career as an Orthopedic Surgeon and hopefully through my Master's thesis (if given the chance) be able to contribute to the practice of Orthopedics geared towards the underserved patients of our country. Also, rather than seeing it as means to an end, I think the Korean language program is exactly what I need to achieve my dream of becoming a fluent Korean speaker.
shintacandrade 10 / 74 87  
Mar 10, 2015   #2
Hi jangppapunk, I have several comments for your writing. I hope it can increase your writing skills as well as my skills because I am also learning like you do :)

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I was born as the eldest child of a low-middle class family in a province near Metro Manila. My mother is a public school teacher and my father is an employee at a biscuit factory. Sometimes, our needs would be way beyond our means.Let me (again) rewrite this: Sometimes, my parents' salaries are not enough to cover all of our needs. Back into when I was in elementary school, I recalled athe time when I couldn'tcould not go to a school field trip programme because my parents cannotcould not afford it. However,Ourmy family's difficult financial situation did not stopblock me from being an excellent student.RatherIn contrast , it washad become my inspiration to strive hard and make the most out of the education that my parents painstakingly provided for me. I was consistently standing in the top of our class, joining and winning competitions. I graduated elementary school as the class valedictorian and was accepted into a specialized science high school, Philippine Science High School.

jangppapunk, overall, your writing contents are good. However, I think you need to recheck your writing and rewrite it like aforementioned above :). Good luck..
Komank Sukarma 4 / 12  
Mar 11, 2015   #3
Inspiring - self introduction!
Good job friend..
@Kakak Candra, you are from Indonesia, aren't you?
Nice to know you are here too..if you don't mind and pleasure, please give me the hand of any mistakes I made on my writing skills ok?

Thanks so much.


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