Chevening. Networking has helped me collaborate, share information and events with contacts

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Chevening is worth promoting

Asides meeting new people, experiencing different cultures, ideologies and thoughts, networking has helped me collaborate, share information and opportunities with contacts.

My activities in the university helped me network effectively. I joined a non-profit organisation in 2012 where I served as the organizing secretary over about six hundred members. This position afforded me the opportunity of meeting the organizing and technical personnel of other organizations within the university community. Collaborating and working with those, I have learnt from their knowledge base, skill-set and experience in the field and that has ensured my excellent service delivery in my organization. I leveraged on the built network while planning and executing our annual musical concert which was well attended by over four thousand people. I also referred some of my junior colleagues to those technical personnel for training and today some of them are experts in the field. I am still in contact with some of them till today; we share ideas and the latest trends in logistics, power and sound.

My internship opportunity at the world's largest oilfield services company came by networking with the Society of Petroleum Engineers (SPE). I was a student member of my university chapter and an active volunteer in the society. I brought in my expertise in planning which I have acquired from the non- profit organization and network of friends to the SPE. This helped improve the planning and logistics activities of the club. Consequently, based on my excellent academic performance and active relations with the club, I was recommended for an aptitude test that got me the role with the oil giant.

I believe strongly that one of the most effective ways of building and maintaining healthy networks is by mentoring. I have and am still enjoying advices, knowledge and experiences from my academic and professional network. I have also been giving back by mentoring a few.

In my third year, I noticed a lady on my team that was usually with a low countenance. I moved close to her and discovered that she was not performing well in her studies. Her CGPA was 2.21 as against her goals of 3.5 and above. Citing people that have succeeded similar situations was a lot of encouragement. I advised and guided her through rescheduling her daily activities to prioritize her academics; emphasized the importance of group study and introduced my concept of advanced CGPA estimation. She attained a CGPA of 3.02 in a semester, graduated with her target class and improved significantly on her role. Two other mentees finished with First class honours. I still maintain a good contact with them till date.

I look forward to providing qualitative mentoring to my junior colleagues in the Chevening community. I would be excited be part of a global community: contributing and sharing my industrial knowledge and experience with other great minds. I also hope to use my networks and influence to promote Chevening seminars and career development programmes.

Tolulope, your networking skills are too academic in nature and will not help your application. The Chevening networking essay must prove that you have the professional capacity to help promote the Chevening scholarship upon your graduation. It should also prove that you have a solid professional foundation that will allow you to make contact with people in your field of work whenever necessary either in the accomplishment of your work tasks or in an effort to help a fellow Chevening alumna or current scholar. This essay doesn't prove that you have any professional capacity to implement an existing network. This sounds more like you are still in college, without any professional work experience, and without a professional network to speak of.

If you want this essay to have a chance of helping your application, you will need to revise the essay to reflect your professional networking experience. Discuss how you developed its foundation, how you maintained it, and how you are presently growing and nurturing that network. After that, you can explain how this network can be of help to you in the future, how the Chevening network will help you, and how your existing and future network can help the scholarship program and its future scholars as well. Remember, after you graduate, you will enter a mentoring role to the next batch of scholars, will most likely need your networking help. That is one of the reasons why you need to present a professional networking discussion in your essay.

Review the prompt requirements and you will see how off-base your essay is from the actual requirements. You can also refer to the sample networking essays here for this scholarship if you need to read examples related to how to develop the proper essay format for this topic.

@Holt
Thank you very much @Holt. I'm sorry for the late reply... tech difficulties.
I really appreciate you taking out time to review and advise.
I will revise the essay as advised...
Once again, thank you.