Hello all,
I would appreciate your kind feedback on my essay for Chevening
Chevening is looking for individuals with strong networking skills, who will engage with the Chevening community and influence and lead others in their chosen profession. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your networking skills, and outline how you hope to use these skills in the future.
(466/500)
utilizing networking in a proper way
Networking will be usefull if we can maintain it better. This is what I feel in my profesional career. Starting from joining four days "Linking Awareness Journey" course with elephant in Way Kambas National Park, my career has been developed. In this course, I met with veterinarians and people who concern with animals. They come from Indonesia as well as another countries such as Japan, Singapore, Germany, South Africa, and Canada. Some people whose I meet in that course help me to gain experience in veterinary field and another networking.
One of people that I meet in that course is Director and founder of ALeRT (The Alliance of Integrated Forest Conservation). He is one of Indonesian rhino expert that has more than 20 years experience in that field. I learned alot from him trough the discussion and activities. He also help me expanding my network in rhino conservation group. Last year I helped him to create Sumatran rhino conservation program in Kutai Barat, Borneo. This is a collaboration work beetwen NGO, local university, and goverment which hold the rhino conservation policy. In this program, I was not only responsible in management of health and reproduction, but also another aspect like population monitoring and public awareness. During that term, I start to have an interest in concept of global wildlife conservation. I realize that wildlife conservation can be succes with the support of all stakeholder.
After completing the program, I have good profesional relationship with some NGO. One of that organization is WWF. WWF also have rhino conservation program in Borneo, Ujungkulon, and Sumatera. Last May, I helped WWF Ujungkulon Program to do their disease surveillance project in Ujungkulon National Park Area. This is a new experience for me in disease surveillance field and enrich my point of view about wildlife health.
Currently, I am working in Animal Sanctuary with a various species of wildlife. When I decide to work as wildlife practitioners, one of veterinarian from "Linking Awareness Journey" course suggest me to work in this sanctuary. She also encouraged me to actively participate in ASLIQEWAN (Indonesian Wildlife Veterinarian Assosiation). This organization is helping a lot to develop my ability as a wildlife veterinarian. There is a time during my work as practitioner, I faced the case that i've never dealt with before, I consulted to the expert veterinarian in that group so I can give the treatment correctly. The networks in this group also make it easier for me to coordinate with veterinarians in other conservation organizations when there is an inter-institutional collaboration.
From my experience above, I can make a conclusion that networks will give a lot of benefit if we can utilized it better. I will use my networks with Chevening community to make a mutual benefit for my country and Chevening Program.Dear afitri,
There is nothing in your essay that dictates a network was created in relation to your work related activities.
Chevening needs to know about your professional network that means making a connection with someone at work, how do you maintain it over the long period so that you can call that person when you need help (e.g.,a professional favor or help in your work) .
so you need to talk about people not yourself and mention 2 situations/problemsin your work, you needed help and contacted a person who could assist you or give advice.
how did you contact or meet? what was the result? Did he refer you to someone else? If yes, then you have an existing contact or network at the moment.
talk about the importance of that network in relation to your career and how it can help the Chevening scholars both past and present.
For example, by working in Animal Sanctuary, talk about the work problems in which you contacted maybe one of your professors, trainers or colleagues, then apply the above tips.
I hope that will help you.
Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,830 
4781 Aidell, this essay is very good in terms of showing how your network was created and how you nurture it. However, you skim over the portions that can present solid ideas as to how these networks work for you even as you collaborate with the various people you have met and helped in the discharge of your profession. There are numerous networking examples that you can focus on in this essay. However, I would like you develop a specific set of examples, namely:
1. How the director of ALeRT helped you to expand your network. What situations were present that allowed for this unique work opportunity to take place?
2. Explain which network you have that led to your becoming a member of the WWF and how that membership occurred. How has the WWF helped you with your rhino conservation program? As a part of your network, would you say that the WWF has the most potential to help you grow your professional network? Why?
Bear in mind that you have a 500 word limit on the essay so you don't really need too many examples here. However, if you can add one more example of networking, your essay could be made stronger. Specially if that network is based on a locally based organization that helps the wildlife as that shows that your country is also involved in wildlife conservation. There is a little lack of that representation in the essay. How you handle the examples presentation is up to you. You can go with 2 or more.
Your explanation as to why this network is important is very weak. You need a stronger justification that ties in directly with the Chevening wildlife program (if there is) and how their scholars from this field access and be enhanced by your existing network. At the moment, you are not really making a strong case for that topic.
Hello @asmaasalem and @Holt,
Thankyou very much for your feedback. It's very clear and really help me to find the weakness in my essay. I will fix it according to your feedback and post it soon. I hope you can help me again after I fix it.
