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Chevening program is like an award for me, they give us an opportunity to study in big country, UK


kevinperdana 1 / 1  
Nov 14, 2014   #1
Dear... Could you please check my grammar for my essay below It contains 4 questions. Thank you in advance

Question 1
Your personal statement: Explain why you are applying to the Chevening programme and describe the personal, intellectual and interpersonal qualities that make you well placed to be a future leader in your home country.


Chevening program is one of the best scholarship program and it is a pleasure for me if I join it. Indonesia is a develop country then Chevening give us the opportunity with program that cover life cost in that country. I will give my best to get this scholarship, because it adding my experience to them.

My motivation to apply Chevening is that is great opportunity for study in UK. With my effort to gain the skill and knowledge in UK I dream to become a success in my future. Furthermore, the environment of college could improve my experience. I believe discuss with other people from other country will gain good point of view. I can learn from different background to solving a problem. Otherwise, I am well-adapt and fast learner, so I think there is no problem if I study in UK. I have to work hard to achieve that.

Question 2
Your academic background: Describe your educational achievements to date. You should explain why you feel confident in your ability to successfully complete your proposed courses of study in the UK, and specify why your courses were chosen.


From elementary school until senior high school, I always got ranked. Then, I began to college and got scholarship from President University, so I just paid half of institution fee. I had Bachelor of Science in Economy on 2012 with satisfied result. I have focusing my concentration in Management.

I begin to work in finance staff for 6 months on a restaurant. It felt great, because I can applied the theory on my bachelor, like Finance and others. After that, I got offered in Mondelēz International as an Import Staff. I learnt a lot and got knowledge much in this position from upstream to downstream. Even though the scope of my job description is limited, but I learnt from my colleague like supply, demand, production and even distribution. I think that I have to go to study in Supply Chain. To achieve my goals in the future, I will take Supply Chain Management in UK. UK is the best choice for my educational achievement and for my future.

Question 3
Your leadership and networking skills: Outline your experience and style of leadership. You should discuss your commitment to networking within the Chevening community, and beyond, in order to find solutions or bring about beneficial change.


Since I childhood, I joined Scout to my organizations. What I got from this organization is very valuable. I have discipline and independent, which instilled from childhood until I grew up right now.

Then I joined Diver Venture organization. This club is Student Association for Environmental and Adventure Activity. What I learnt from this club are I have to be mature and responsible. I often do the expeditions with my colleagues and got experience from each expedition. Example, I did an expedition to Merbabu and Merapi mountains as a group leader. We planned well and prepare very detail. Until we reach the Merbabu Summit, it well worked, afterward the incident that two of our members lost when we were almost get the base camp of mountain. As a group leader, I have to decide carefully, because it effect to lives of our members. As a matter fact, the weather is bad and our members got tired to work on that. With that condition, I made a discussion, think and decide fast. Fortunately, our members can be saved in the next day.

Question 4
Your career plan and benefit to your home country : Describe your immediate plans upon completion of your Chevening award. You should explain your longer-term (5-10 year) career objectives and describe how your time in the UK will help you achieve these. You should also discuss how a Chevening award would benefit you and your home country.
Chevening program is like an award for me, they give us an opportunity to study in big country, UK. In that country, I could discover from the simple case, character and culture of the people until discuss and sharing the knowledge from amazing people in there. That can't be found in my country.

My planning for the future is became a professional in supply chain. As we look, Indonesia now- a-days is potential to grow up for manufacturing industries, but some countries like China and India is more ahead from Indonesia right now. I have concerned to advice the distribution in Indonesia. With Indonesian's geographic challenge me to apply theory and knowledge to make better the distribution. The manufacturing industries sentralized in Java, meanwhile it gave impact for the more expensive of the price in Maluku and Papua. In addition, supply is uneven, it is often difficult to obtain such fuel on the Borneo.
chucnt 6 / 18  
Nov 14, 2014   #2
scholarship program> programs
develop country>developing country ?
Chevening give >gives
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Nov 14, 2014   #3
Indonesia is a developING country then Chevening giveS us the opportunity with program that coverS life cost in that country.

Subject verb agreement
Chevening scholarship program creates an opportunity for some scholarship hunters to secure an prestigious university in the world.

I will give my best to get this scholarship, because it adding my experience to them(you don't have a verb here, rewrite this sentence) .

I believe discuss with other people from other country will gain good point of view.

I believe that have discussion with other people from other country can enlarge the global networking and can broaden point of view.

Otherwise, I am well-adapted and fast learner, so I think there is no problem if I study in UK. I have to work hard to achieve that.
OP kevinperdana 1 / 1  
Nov 15, 2014   #4
Dear Chucnt, thank for the feedback.

Dear tiaDs, many thanks for your input.


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