Hi There! I'd like to ask for opinions regarding the content and structure of my personal statement. The instructions only talked about the minimum length of the essay (200 words), and nothing more.
Thanks in advance!
i have no regrets
Around 3 to 4 years ago I had to choose 2 from 3 subjects for my IGCSEs; Business, History, and Economics. Usually, people would choose the subject they're familiar with in order to have an "easier life", but since I was a child back then, I chose to study Economics and Business only to avoid my dreadful enemy - History. I don't regret it though. In a way, I believe it was meant to be since it was a perfect balance of theory and numeric problem solving. I enjoy analyzing data and being able to express my own views based on the theories I've learned. Unlike a few other subjects where there are fixed answers, economic theories allows me to think outside of the box, but within the rules provided. To me, learning economics gives me a glimpse of the endless possibilities for a better country.
As I studied more about economics through the national curriculum, I became more intrigued by how economics conquer the system today - through macroeconomics, and microeconomics. Understanding the fundamental theories like economic systems, inflations, and monetary and fiscal policies gives me a sense of fulfillment, for I get to understand a snippet of what's going on around the world. I also like to scroll through the World Economic Forum Instagram account to keep updated on the latest issue.
To further feed my curiosity, I volunteered for forums that revolved around the topic "circular economy for a sustainable future"; AAA, and BBB. I was able to deepen my knowledge while simultaneously develop my teamwork and communication skills. Along the forum, I was devastated because most of the data gathered were about the amount of trash leakage and carbon emissions that have already exceeded its limit. On the other hand, I was also stunned by the amount of brilliant and inspiring ideas that could make a huge difference in the world, especially in my home country - Indonesia. However, plans need action. The speakers practically begged for the support from the authorities and people of power in order to take action and achieve the goal. They need everyone's cooperation to make this work, and I'm inspired and motivated to be one of the people to make a change in this economy.
All Throughout my high school and gap year, I've always liked to challenge myself with non-academic ventures, especially physical activities since they free me from stress. Thus, I participate in a variety of extracurricular activities, such as singing, dancing, acting, and sports. I've had my fair share of "first-times" in high school, and those new experience lit a fire of eagerness within me. I have always looked forward to what I can do if I keep on trying, thus I attempt to enhance my capability. An example would be when I first performed a dance routine with my friend. We have always danced together for fun, but because that night we decided to get out of our comfort zone, we were then invited to join the modern dance team. Not long after, we competed and won in numerous dance competitions while representing our school.
I yearn for more challenges as I gain more experiences - sometimes I forget about my own health since I'm always excited about trying something new. For example, one time I did not attend school for nearly a month due to participating in XXX, sports competition, and volunteering as a school performer. It was a month filled with hectic schedule, dizziness, and stressing over my scores. Despite that, I was able to cope with it. I believe so, because I was given the Director's Award by the principal during my graduation ceremony. He announced that it's given to a student who has shown improvement in all aspects of school life - academics, school activities, social, and spiritual growth. I have always associated myself with as many extracurricular activities as possible in order to challenge myself as a person. Never have i thought that I'd receive an award for doing something I chose to do. Regardless, I am grateful for all of it. I'm especially thankful for the support my family and friends have given me. Without them, there may be times I wouldn't choose to get back up when I've fallen.
Obstacle after obstacle, and struggles I could've avoided - I have no regrets, because they all turned me into who I am today. Pursuing this education will be an honorable challenge, and I'm confident that with the skills I've developed throughout these years together with the investment on studying economics, I'll be a great help to ensure that we'll achieve a sustainable future.
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The personal statement should focus on developing the discussion regarding the growth of your interest in Economics. The first paragraph does not bode well for your application. You make it sound like you had no choice but to study Economics. There was no excitement in your voice, There was more emotion when you said you did not want to study history. Why not reflect a little more and think about the reasons why you came to love Economics? That is what this discussion is all about. You have to signify an interest in helping to improve the field of Economics or, a desire to improve yourself through the study of Economics. Try to use these guide questions to help you revise the essay:
- What was your first introduction to Economics?
- How did you perceive Economics to be about upon that introduction?
- What specific parts of Economics interested you in further studies? How did these motivate you to take this as your undergraduate course?
- How do you see your future as an Economist should you graduate from this course?
- If required, explain the reasons you felt that your choice of university to study Economics at is the logical choice for you.
Once you respond to these questions, you should have a pretty solid personal statement available to support your scholarship application.