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Why did you choose the Master of Taxation at the University of Sydney? AAS Supporting Statement


Stephan 1 / -  
Jan 26, 2021   #1
Hello everyone. I will try to apply for Australia Awards Scholarship this year.

Thanks for reviewing my essay.


Why did you choose your proposed course and institution?



In the past decades, the Indonesia government relies on tax revenue to finance Indonesia's budget and development programs. Acknowledging the critical roles, Directorate General of Taxes (DGT) is currently reforming the tax system by re-channelling services into digital channels through upgrading the Contact Centre capacity. This approach and other policies expectedly boost Indonesia's tax revenues and improve service delivery. As a supervisor at the Contact Centre, I am in charge of coordinating this transformation with many institutions, including the Australian Tax Office (ATO) and PROSPERA. I find that, among several alternatives, Australia's system shows advantages to be adopted by DGT on digitalising tax service delivery. Yet, the process should assess both the Indonesian and Australian tax systems. Therefore, I am passionate to learn the Australia tax law and its administration services by enrolling in a Master of Taxation in Australia. The study will award me a comprehensive understanding of the tax administration to support DGT's reform once I return to the Contact Centre.

Considering those facts, I will enrol to the Master of Tax at the University of Melbourne, as many subjects offered are tailored toward my learning needs. Foundations of Tax Law will give me a robust knowledge of the Australian tax system. I will also harness valuable tax collection skills through Income Tax Compliance and Enforcement case study. Beneficially, living in Melbourne will provide an opportunity to collaborate with my contacts in the ATO and observe the implementation of the tax system by ATO directly.

As an alternate, I choose the Master of Taxation at the University of Sydney. I anticipate that several units of study, such as Introduction to Australian Business Tax, Public Policy, and Economics of Tax Policy, will offer me an analytical approach to steer the Contact Centre's revitalisation. Moreover, Independent Research Project will sharp my critical thinking.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,317 3351  
Jan 26, 2021   #2
Since this is a word limited response, you need to balance the presentation to reflect a proper discussion for all 3 reference points. That means, you must summarize the first paragraph. Make it quick. You are over explaining and losing the interest of the reviewer. Start with :

quote=Stephan] I am passionate to learn t... the Contact Centre.[/quote]
Use that as the hook to reel in the reviewer. Since this is an Australian scholarship, you should open with a reference to Australia more than anything else. After that presentation, you can summarize the problem the Indonesian government has and you are looking to help resolve the issue.

The University of Melbourne discussion is developed enough as it shows a clear alignment with your country's programs and your goals. The same cannot be said for the alternate university choice. How do you anticipate that the courses will help you gain an analytical approach to the revitalization of the center? Why would the research help sharpen your thinking? How do these information become relevant to the course you chose and how it applies to your career path?


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