A typical day of your life in the year of 2026
It is 6 o'clock in the morning now, while looking at the clock I noticed that time has passed by so fast. I have spent 12 hours working on a new project for my masters thesis. I decided to keep on working but my body feels very worn out which leads me to believe that I should take a small break right now.
This break starts with a bowl of Pho, the best choice for me to keep my energy and motivation high. As I kept on eating, I started thinking about my hometown.
I am a 25 years old girl now. After graduating from university, I decided to move to New York City to continue my graduate studies. My goal is to make a new approach in Vietnam scientific field.
For many years, Vietnam is still in a scientifically backward state. In my opinion, this is potentially because scientists are not being appreciated and the younger generation cannot approach it completely due to the relegation and red tape in our academic syllabus. I want to start a project and some orientations to enable students mainly focused on students who are at the age of 16 to work in a laboratory, experimenting with some tentations and see how effective they are to our life's. Practical experiments in the lab differs vastly from the theory lessons in vietnamese academic books which is unrelated to real life.
When I work in a laboratory, I feel completely different, which effect my attitudes a lot. I live slower, think twice, and was able to grow mature. The old me used to live so quickly that sometimes I missed out on a lot of things which could potentially be important. Science helped me find myself, control things around, and allow me to find my limits, my two opposite sides- the aggressive one and the peaceful one. Where my life is just made of paradox where I could pursue my goal or be passive and allow things to happen in a more naturally setting. I want to show Vietnamese students my own experiences, to show them how wonderful science is.
Looking at the clock, it's 8 o'clock in the morning now, I have to get back to work immediately or else I won't finish it in time. I intend to keep working all day. I decide to go outside to grab some food and drinks. Manhattan in the morning is still so busy and full of chaos at the moment. In comparison, my life in the lab is more quiet and peaceful. When I look at the bright sky today, I notice that it is such a beautiful day to start with a hot cup of latte. It is undeniably a waste of time to spend my entire day in the lab today. However, it is a decision I have made with my life to pursue a goal that I have to complete and in some sense I find happiness in my work, in the field of science where scientific advancement could potentially lead to a better future. I believe that by leading by example, the future generation of Vietnamese kids could potentially think and live that way as well, for the better and advancement of Vietnam's future.
Hi, I think you could have incorporated the prompt a little better. You start off ok, but then you switch into this weird past/present story. It sounds more like you as a 15 year old outlining your goals, rather than a 25 year old reflecting on the project she is working on. Keeping this in present tense and first person will be better - for instance, maybe something like "I still have trouble believing how backward the Vietnamese science community is. Even after all these years, they seem stuck in the 20th century. I know my project will help though. Giving high school kids a chance to work in a real lab environment is sure to pique their interest, and help my country in the process. But my project is not going to do itself, so after a quick break I will go straight back to work."
Also, I have trouble understanding you as the main character. You talk about working in the lab, but maybe that happened in the past? Or are you still a scientist? Because your project does not sound scientific, I mean this is not research or an experiment. It is more like a Master's thesis someone majoring in education would do. So are you a scientist in this scenario? Or maybe you are a scientist who in her spare time is trying to push forward this initiative? In that case though, it would not be part of a Masters Thesis.
Hallo there,
In my point of view, your essay is good enough,a good flow and interesting topic.However, you should pay attention much more in your diction.Let me show the example,
-... to believe that I should take a SMALL break right now.
-I think SMALL is not suitable with BREAK, It should be "SHORT BREAK"
