Here are some ideas about what to write
1) More specific details about why UM and why creative writing.
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[i]Learning about the Arts and Sciences program really opened my mind. HOW??
To know that I could be as close to home and get my bachelor's in Creative Writing made me ecstatic." WHY??
2) Give examples of your favorite stories, poems and essays - what inspired you the most?
My imagination ran wild, as thoughts of stories, poems and essays came out so easily.
3) Which philosopher's great mind is the most similar to yours? which do you identify with the most?
The Lord blessed me with this mind to create and flourish into the great mind similar to that of the great philosophers of our past.
You can incorporate the last paragraph (about your parents' separation) in the preceding paragraph instead of devoting an entire paragraph to it. This is better used building up to convincing closing statement.