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Crime prevention - AAS Master of Public Policy - Why you choose this course and institution



peribaik 1 / 1  
Feb 28, 2026   #1
APPLICATION ESSAY FOR THE UNIVERSITY OF MELBOURNE - Max 2000 characters (I have limited answer)

Throughout my studies and professional experiences, I have developed a strong interest in transnational crime in (A country) and its domestic consequences for social stability, particularly in human trafficking cases.

My internship at NCB Interpol XXX significantly shaped my determination to work in transnational crime prevention and policy, focusing on a community-based approach to handling human trafficking. At the end of my internship, I had the opportunity to speak with the Head of the Transnational and International Crime Unit. I shared my concern based on my experience at the Embassy of XXX in Bangkok, where I observed that several repatriated victims of human trafficking later returned to the same illegal jobs and were exploited again. I asked him, "What is your opinion as a law enforcement officer?" He responded that in such cases, they are neither purely victims nor perpetrators, and although they cannot always be convicted, certain rights may be revoked as consequences. That conversation stayed with me and led me to reflect on the complicity of victimhood of the transnational crime issue in (A country).

Academically, I have taken courses such as Terrorism and Transnational Crime, Border and Transnationalism, Security and Strategic Studies, and Maritime Policy Studies. These provided a strong theoretical foundation, yet also revealed a gap in my knowledge. While I can analyse security challenges, I lack formal training in designing practical policy frameworks that create tangible community-level impact.

For this reason, I seek to pursue further studies in public policy. The Master of Public Policy and Management at the University of Melbourne attracts me because electives such as Migration and Development closely align with my focus on forced migration and structural exploitation. I am also particularly interested in Thinking and Acting Ethically, as transnational crime work often involves complex moral dilemmas. I believe both subjects could build analytical and ethical policy foundations.

At the same time, the Master of Public Policy at RMIT University attract me because it is the only program in Australia offering a specific elective on Human Trafficking. This would deepen my understanding of the issue within a broader policy framework, beyond a purely criminal justice perspective.

P.S please if u can help me improve my essay, I would like for you to brutally honest about it
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 16060  
Feb 28, 2026   #2
I can tell which aspect of this essay was AI generated because of the immediate change in the writing tone and the lack of information within the 2 paragraphs. While the personal insight paragraphs were very strong and showed a personal flaw, which indicates that you are not perfect but rather, a human striving to be a good person, the most important aspect of the statement was left generic and lacking in comparative information.

I strongly urge you to personally rewrite the sections that describe the reasons for your university choices. These are crafted by AI, which is why the explanation lacks the same personal impact and insight that the earlier paragraphs had. These need to sound more informative, more personal and contemplating. What were the personal reasons you chose these universities? What personal shortcomings will the courses at each university address? What will you bring to the university that will result in a better student community and an impact full course of study? Do not use Ai to revise those paragraphs. You are currently sitting at an acceptable percentage for AI generated text. Pushing the AI writing above that would result in AI Detection tools flagging your essay as not being human written and therefore, disqualify you from the scholarship consideration.
OP peribaik 1 / 1  
Feb 28, 2026   #3
@Holt Hi, thank you for your comment, I really appreciate your time and advice especially about the AI. To be honest I have my own original script but unfortunately it's just too long to the point it's extremely exceed to 2.000 characters. so I'm using AI to summarize it strictly to 2.000 cause I can't figure out which part I should throw away and for me each words are important plus the language barrier make it really hard to pouring my thoughts into the essay, I'm really struggling on this matter. But I'll take all your advice, including to rewrite my essay on my own. Thank you!


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