*Please help me with these two essays (long and short ones)!!! Grammar good? Does it fit the prompt? Any feedback will do!*
Merit - 400 to 600 word limit - Community service can be a valuable part of the college experience. If you were to devote one year of service to a volunteer project, what would it be, and what would you hope to accomplish?
Nature has unendingly captivated me. I remember my first time contributing to wildlife conservation work. The sun was illuminating the sublime prairie. I was with my fellow classmates and our task was to replant the MacFarlane's Four-O' clock flower, a type of species whose existence is threatened in Boise, Idaho. The workload was extensive and difficult, but I valued every minute of it. Feeling the loam as I firmly pressed my hands to the ground, allowing the grass to fill the empty gaps between my fingers, and helping wounded animals along the way is something I could not get enough of. From that moment on, I knew what I wanted to be in life. Becoming a wildlife and conservation biologist is my dream. If I could devote one year of service to a volunteer project, it would be wildlife management.
For me, it is not a matter of "if" I could devote my time to nature protection; it is the matter of "when" I will. I plan to contribute to the rehabilitation of nature via many non-profit organizations. One particular program that I plan to be involved in is the International Student Volunteers. ISV has especially caught my interest because of the extensive opportunities they provide to individuals for immersion in international volunteer programs-a perfect fit for someone like me who wants to contribute to the environment, globally. The International Student Volunteer organization offers community contributions such as environmental management, children's programs, infrastructure development, and conservation of habitats.
The mass increase of population and urban development has significantly increased globally. Wildlife protection is needed in countries such as South Africa, Ecuador, and Thailand where many habitats have been threatened. Practices such as over-grazing, deforestation, and urban development are leading to irreversible changes-soil compaction, modification of local climatic settings, desertification, and erosion. Subsequently, habitats are being lost, forcing the rapid extinction of species.
As third world countries industrialize, buildings and roads are occupying and overlapping areas that were once homes for creatures. As a result, these homeless species are either hunted or caged. What I hope to accomplish is to participate in wildlife protection organizations that develop environmental farming practices where the human population will not encroach on the habitats of animals, allowing both the wildlife and landscape to flourish.
By volunteering at ISV wildlife care and their rehabilitation facilities, I will not only have the opportunity to care for wounded creatures, but also be edifying people to learn how to live harmoniously and sustainably within their ecosystem. Integrating and promoting the basic concept of reduce, reuse, and recycle in the local community could vastly save environmental contamination and destruction. Likewise I will be encouraging sustainable drinking water and its fundamental role in human and nature to the community. Teaching young minds the importance of water conservation in term will play a reciprocal role in a healthier environment. Most importantly however, spreading and raising awareness about the habitat extinction and the species that reside within them are vital for a salubrious environment. These are some of the many significant objectives I am hoping to accomplish, creating a better future.
Attending Semester at Sea will expand my comprehension of animals and ecosystems in a way that no other study abroad program can compete with. Since SAS is a multi-country program, I will be exposed to several unique environments. Likewise, I will obtain the knowledge needed to be successful in my career. Nature as well as animals has always been my passion and Semester at Sea will help me achieve my dream: becoming a wildlife and conservation biologist.
Merit - 200 word limit - Describe your most meaningful achievement and how it relates to your participation and success on Semester at Sea.
Actions speak louder than words. "The Pantomime King," is what my peers in my acting troupe, Image Factory called me and that is how I discovered my identity; what made me extraordinary. Pantomime: the art of silent acting that portrays a story using action and music alone. It was something everyone was disastrous at, except for me. The first time my peers ever exalted me was when I performed my first pantomime piece called "Magical Origami." I can remember it lucidly, standing on that bare stage, my body motionless. As the serene violins entered I tilted my head up and glided across the stage. When the strings began to interlock with the soft harmonies of the guitar, I opened a box of origami paper and began folding it into something unreal. Then as the cello weaved around the prevailing drumbeats, the pleated dragon came to life; a seamless, comforting melody and story was fabricated. Constructing that piece was the most elating moments of my life because I received no assistance but still triumphed. My actions alone created my self-identity and by attending Semester at Sea, in conjunction, I can broaden my horizon of the world and most importantly, myself.
ChichoTran
very good, but grammars often the problem and some places the sentence meaning is not clear.
what does it refers the sentence I could not understand like whose role water or your, which nature which community environment or human .
Likewise I will be encouraging sustainable drinking water and its fundamental role in human and nature to the community.
Teaching young minds the importance of water conservation in term will play a reciprocal role in a healthier environment.
This sentence is blur
Attending Semester at Sea will expand my comprehension of animals and ecosystems in a way that no other study abroad program can compete with
why other study program can not compete, please give the reason.
