What will you gain from your scholarship?
a)First, this training can further my research on the area of diet and diseases which is crucial is combating lifestyle related diseases in Fiji. Second, this training can also sharpen my skills on leadership, critical and creative thinking and problem solving. This will in turn help me to inspire and motivate the rest of the Dieticians and other healthcare workers in Fiji on how to better address nutrition challenges they face in their own fields.
(b)Understanding and applying nutrition knowledge and skills to all aspects of health care are extremely important, and all health care professions need basic training to effectively assess dietary intake and provide appropriate guidance, counselling, and treatment to their patients. With obesity rates at an all-time high and the increasing prevalence of diabetes projected to cost the Fiji government billions of dollars, the need for inter-professional nutrition education is paramount. In addition, while providing consultation on improving food choices for the people of Fiji, economic constraints may contribute to the unhealthy food choices
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This is an incomplete representation of the prompt requirements. You are supposed to present at least 3 examples, you only have 2 represented here, without the required obstacles discussion and how your training can help you overcome it. Your presentation is simplistic and does not lend itself to a serious discussion of how the studies will help you in your line of work in terms of improving your field / profession upon your return. It feels like a draft but I cannot help you improve it due to lack of information in your writing. Change the presentation format from outline to essay form and this time, completely develop the discussion based on:
- Problem you need to improve
- How you plan to fix the problem
- What obstacles might prevent you from solving the situation
- How you can use your learning, training, and networks from the masters course to get around the situation
Expand your discussion points. Make sure your presentation is relevant to the discussion requirements. Right now, you are presenting a partially applicable outline, nothing more.
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