Hi guys, I'm new here. Can I please ask for some comments on my personal statement? Are there any parts that I have to elaborate more on? Any inappropriate sentences? weird phrasing or order of sentences? As well as grammar and spelling mistakes. Thank you so much!
I think you've done a good job. The ideas are presented logically and clearly. Only thing I wish you to improve on is the introduction;
I have a dream of making commercialized In vitro meat a reality. Ever since I came across the idea of lab-grown meat in an article, I have been fascinated with its potential to solve issues like livestock environmental damage, and the cruel treatment of farm animals. This had prompted me to consider a career in biochemical research, to optimize the culture of In vitro meat.
Here I guess you can be a little more descriptive, as well as creative in presenting your case. I didn't check whether you have already met the required word count. If you have some allowance, then add a few lines to enhance its effect.