Effective decisions I made in our firm privided me trust from the management to run my team

chevening leadership and influence question

Dear readers,

Please comment my essay below for chevening in leadership and influence question.
Thank you in advance.

I managed purchase materials of company especially food and beverage in amusement park. I took all decisions about purchases materials and advice owner to have an efficient cost in order to make effective business ways. I did flow chart of purchasing standard operating procedure, negotiate, create contract and managed stock or inventory. I was purchasing staff before I took risks to get new challenge and enjoy my first year as purchasing manager in different sector. It was a wonderful because I arrange and lead all the purchase with all my passions and heart. I pursue what company needs to get profit from vendors properly with best price contract and safety agreement. I designed what will user do when they need materials to make operational work and how the materials arrived safely in their workplace. My first experience as leader was developed my youngest staff and make him stable with our working deadline. At that time all my staff was had lower education and life with poverty. I experienced with people who did not understand how to operate computer and even type an email. It took extra patient with them, I tought them how to have an attitude as a professional by giving an live example for them. Worked as a purchasing manager makes me focus and I hit the target on time. Be an excellent example was one of my step to develop my team. Leading the team such a honor. Management trust me to run my team with values. Integrity, courage, teamwork were core of my team. When leaders become a servant to do excellent in every ways it will influence team to reach goals. I solved many problems that happened at operations team such as created flow in their process in order to have in line with my team. When collaborations happened completely company will reach the goal. Leaders has a power to chase what company purposes. Our decision is company goals. I designed my position as an business owners. When I act as a business owner I take decisions carefully and consider benefits to company. Compared price was part of my life, I solved high standards of quality products by sharing products knowledge to vendors and my team. It would increase high profit both company and vendors. Dealing with vendors, maintain good relationship and create visions were part of my step to reach the goals.

Here now I promote and manage another company. I am shaping my attitude and gratitude to become a great leader. I have ever experienced that leaders develop people as leaders also in another workplace, treat the team as do you want and leaders mirror to the team. Your teams is your goals.

Hello @Sara2401,

I can understand the message you want to send across in this essay, but your essay would greatly benefit in some grammatical corrections in order to ensure that the readers understand what you are saying.

In terms of content, I like the example of you mentoring your staff and teaching him new skills. But I think you need to describe more on the results that your staff achieved after your mentorship and guidance, which will give some perspective on your leadership success.

The sentence "Leading the team such a honor." can be deleted.

" I solved many problems that happened at operations team ..." can be elaborated more on what problems you solved using your leadership and influencing skills.

Good luck!

@Sara2401
You have quite a good number of ideas in your essay. However, I found it hard to flow through because you packed a lot of information into your first paragraph which appears to be the only paragraph of your write up.

I think your presentation would appear more appealing if you are able to split up the essay into several paragraphs that conveys different aspects of your abilities.

Good luck!

Sara, this is not a leadership and influencing essay. You just wrote a job description for your jobs in paragraph form. This is not a an essay that falls within the requirements of the prompt so you cannot use this essay. Instead, you have to write a new one that does not sound like a job application but rather, an informative essay that does the following:

1. Define what leadership and influencing means to you.
2. Gives a proper example of your leadership skill in relation to your people skills and management.
3. Allows you to deliver a sample of how your leadership abilities allow you to influence your subordinates in such a manner that highlights how they respect you as a leader, which is why they allow you to influence them.

4. Explain why you think you will become better trained as leader and influencer in your company upon your return.

You have to present a clear depiction of your leadership in such a manner that shows your potential to be a respectable leader. Your influencing skills need to be beyond just teaching them how to use a computer. Do not talk down about your subordinates in the essay by saying they are of a low education. A real leader can lead anyone without considering the abilities of a person due to educational handicaps. That was not very nice of you to say in this essay. Show respect for your subordinates when you talk about them. If you don't then you obviously are not a real leader who knows how to respect the people you are assigned to lead.

@tika89
@inok26
Thanks and I will fix it

@Holt
I was waiting your comments and when you're comments arrived I feel grateful.

Actually my main attitude is polite and respect others especially my subordinates. I glad to know that they educational background not makes them lazy or feeling depressed. Effort from them I really appreciate.

I write the new one and send it soon to this forum.
Thank u so much