Not my best essay by far....the consequence of procrastination.
PROMPT: In a one-page personal essay, please discuss what makes you the right recipient for the Bell Scholarship. An understanding of your thoughts and feelings about the importance of a career in engineering, mathematics, physics, computer science or other related scientific field is helpful, but not exclusive. Please use this essay to help the Scholarship Selection Committee better understand who you are and what this scholarship would mean to you.
Exploration is key. Some of our nation's greatest discoveries have come from just exploring certain things and phenomena in our daily lives. People have made findings that they never intended to even come close to, just through probing and searching for answers to questions they may have. I feel with as broad of a subject as engineering, this will be a key role in my career for the rest of life. In fact, as a high school student, I am still questioning what type of engineering I want to pursue. Throughout the past four years, I have taken various courses and found that math and science to be my favorites, hence my choice in engineering. I imagine that when I enter college, I will still have ambiguities as to which major I want to practice. Unfortunately, exploring different types of the field through university classes can be extremely costly. With the help of this scholarship, I would be able to openly look into different sorts of the subject, without the continuous stress over extremely limited funds. I am certain that through doing this, I will find a career path that I will thoroughly enjoy, which will lead to me actually desiring to further explore in the field.
In all honesty, I have always aspired to be a doctor, not only an engineer. Nevertheless, I realize that I need the right technical and specialized skills if I wanted to pursue a career in medicine. Given my strengths in mathematics and science, engineering seemed the best field of undergraduate study for me. Although I am strongly interested in the subject, I felt that an engineering background would be a solid stepping-stone towards a career in a hospital; the methodical and systematic techniques in engineering bolster decision-making and quick thinking, both powerful tools in the field of medicine. If I do indeed end up pursuing medicine, the financial aspect again comes into play. It would be nice to have limited debt from my undergraduate degree so I can focus on my further studies.
Hello :) I'm also writing letters for scholarship at the moment, so I took interest in your essay.
I'm no native English speaker, but I just wanted to cast some ideas on the flow..
The prompt says to show why you are qualified and right recipient of the scholarship, but I can't say I see it in your essay. I think you should be less 'still exploring' but more focused on the field that most interests you. Because after reading your essay I wasn't sure if it's engineering or medicine that you want to do, and it could make you look like you haven't given much thought about what your goal is.
Hope it helped a bit.. good luck!
I agree with Chelchelch. The way you presented your dual interest in engineering and medicine makes me uncertain about how well you would use the money, and I'm sure scholarship essay readers would feel the same.
Instead, write about how you are interested in engineering and medicine, and then elaborate on how you think engineering could be important to the medical field (Biomedical engineering could be the next innovative way to treat cancer or help people with disabilities, for example).
Also, write a little more about you. Why do you want to be an engineer, and why do you want to be a doctor? It's more than just liking the subjects; what do you want to generally do with your life (help people, invent something, etc.)?
