First off, let me just start by saying I'm deeply sorry about the loss of your mom. I know how much losing a family member at a young age can hurt.
Secondly, the biggest problem within this essay is punctuation and a few incomplete phrases and/or thoughts. Mainly, the biggest problem is the use of semi-colons rather than commas.
As such,
My father was a president of a company that was beginning to do extremely well; however,. When my mother became sick, however, my father quit the job to nursecare for her.
I don't know if that helps you at all, but that's just what I saw could improve your essay immensely.
Basically, a few sentences, particularly the ones with dialogue added into it, just need to be rephrased and cleaned up for clarity purposes.
My mom handed me a cloth, while she still had soap and water (on her face? in her eyes?) . I had asked her "mom, doesn't opening your eyes hurt?" When she looked up, her face still covered with soap foam, she replied "no. " I asked, "how come?"and she justshe smiled and replied, "because you're here.." I knew she was lying but I quietly just accepted it..
Otherwise this is a really great essay and good luck getting the scholarship! :]
Hope this advice helps!!!