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The field of accounting + paid experience + scholarship action - Syracuse Essay


tmac  
Dec 4, 2009   #1
HI i have also decided to apply to syracuse uni, and these r some of its essays

1. Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University?

When the financial crises struck China in 2008, millions of people suffered from losing their jobs, and losing money in investments in real estates, shares, and bonds. Companies in China went bankrupt and closed down, and many of my friends suffered because their parents lost their job.

My family, just like many of my friends, was affected by the financial crises severely. Many of their family lost large sum of moneys in investments on real estates. I was also told that my Father had a salary cut, and his job was at risk. All of a sudden, my dream for a new iPod is gone, and I received no more allowance. Once in a while, I would see my mother analyzing the expenses account of our family, and the expression on her face tells me that our financial status is not good.

I had always wanted to help my mum on analyzing the expenses account of our family, as this is part of my duty as I am the oldest son in the family. In the Chinese culture, the oldest son has the responsibilities to help their parents, or they would be seen as not filial to their parents. I also wanted to help my mum to work on the account expenses of my family, because I believe that it is a good chance for me to gain experiences about the job of an accountant, and at the same time, learn how to be a more responsible person. This arouses my passion of being an accountant in the future.

I started to look for colleges that provide accounting programs, and Syracuse University stood out to me. The Joseph I Lubin School of Accounting at Syracuse University has an accounting program that provides the students with a variety of working opportunities with famous firms such as KPMG. This will provide me with the opportunity gain working experience in the field of accounting, and hence, it will better prepare me for the future. Syracuse University will also prepare students to enter the accounting field with passion, dedication, and creativity.

I believe through studying at Syracuse University, I am able to have a greater knowledge towards the field of accounting, especially under the current circumstance, when the unprecedented economic crisis is enervating our society and affecting everyone, the importance of accounting becomes increasingly manifest for everybody to pull though this hardship.

2. If you have had paid work experience, what skills and/or knowledge did you gain?

During the summer holiday of my junior year, I took up a job as a teacher, teaching my neighbor's child Jack how to play the piano. I took up this job, as I wanted to let more people know more about music, and understand more about music. I worked 2 hours a day, 2 days per week, while at the same time, preparing for my senior year.

Patience and perseverance are two factors that I learnt. During my process of teaching, Jack would always request me to teach him new songs. But, I refused every time he requested, and told him that commitment and patience are very important, if he wants to learn piano well. I told Jack that only by being committed to piano, he is going to improve, and play as well as me. I told him that patience is another important factor, as he would have to take time to practice, in order to improve.

After my explanation, Jack decided to learn pieces by pieces. After the summer, Jack has improved on his piano skills, and as a teacher, I am very proud of him and myself, and I feel that I have done a great job.

The job provided me with an opportunity to come in contact with the society, and by taking up this job, I learnt skills that I did not learn before. Communication is another important skill I learnt through the job. I leant that it is very important to communicate with others, as communication is able to let Jack and I understand more about each other, and also learn the right strategy to communicate with others. Through communication, I am able to understand more about Jack's culture, and the way he thinks.

My job gave me the mentality of being in a different community, and the different methods of communicating, and also interacting with others. It also opened a new window for me, where it provided me with the opportunity to come in contact with different people of the world, and make me understand more about it. My job has prepared me to be a more matured person, and prepared me to be a better person in the society.

Mayada  
Dec 4, 2009   #2
My family, just like many of my friends, was affected by the financial crises severely. Many of their familyies lost large sum of moneys in investments on real estates. I was also told that my Father had a salary cut, and his job was at risk.

Focus on your family here

experiences about the job of an accountant

Grammar..

yracuse University stood out to me

Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University?

Do you think you answered the question well? I understand why you're into accounting, and what influenced you.. but It doesn't who why Syracuse is what you chose..

by the way,, this should be posted under admissions essays.. not general writing questions
OP tmac  
Dec 4, 2009   #3
hi
thanks for your opnion, i will look at my essay again, do you have any good idea on how to change it?
EF_Kevin [Contributor] 129  
Dec 5, 2009   #4
In that first one, it will be good if you answer the question -- about what influenced you to apply to Syracuse -- in the first paragraph. The first paragraph only has a few sentences right now... you should add a sentence that talks about the reason this school is the best place for you to learn accounting. One good sentence at the end of the first para will make a lot of improvement to the clarity of the whole essay.
OP tmac  
Dec 6, 2009   #6
hi i did not copy, i forgot to put it in my own words...thank for pointing out
EF_Kevin [Contributor] 129  
Dec 6, 2009   #7
I don't know what parts were copied, so I had to remove it. It's important not to make that kind of mistake!!


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