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My future career plans in biochemistry- scholarship prompt


jessjess8877 1 / 2  
Oct 23, 2011   #1
Compose a one page essay stating your future career goals.

It is difficult to know what you want to do for the rest of your life when you are only 17 years old, and even more difficult to put it into writing. Growing up I was never really sure what I wanted to be, but I always knew that it was going to be something in science. In 8th grade I really enjoyed learning and studying in love with biology, mainly the human body aspect and genetics. For a couple of years I thought that I wanted to be a genetic counselor or a geneticist. Then in 10th and 11th grade I fell in love with chemistry. It put me in quite a dilemma for a little bit. What was I going to do and what was I going to study, chemistry or biology?

When I began my search for colleges I realized that somebody had already solved this problem for me though the major of biochemistry. With a biochemistry major I can go to medical school or into a graduate program for chemistry or biology. Then it would be possible for me to get a job working in a lab, or doing research, I could be a professor and teach, or even become a doctor.

Right now I see myself going to college to obtain a 4 year degree in biochemistry. After I complete my Bachelors degree in Biochemistry I would like to do something different and unique. I feel that it is important to be well rounded so I would like to go to Thailand of a year to teach English to students for a year. I believe that this experience will provide me will valuable skills and knowledge that I could use for the rest of my life. For example, I would be exposed to a different culture and way of life that would open up my mind to the different thoughts and beliefs of people around the world.

After I return from my teaching experiences in Thailand I will continue on to medical school to obtain my M.D. After I have completed my M.D. I would like to continue on to a surgical residency program. During my residency I would like to begin my specialization in neurological surgery. Neurological surgery or neurosurgery is the study of diseases that affect any part of the nervous system and the prevention and diagnosis of them. When my residency is complete it would be necessary for me to do a fellowship in neurosurgery so that I could further my knowledge in this highly specialized field. Once I have completed my fellowship I would be able to get a jobs working at a hospital as a surgeon. I would like to work at a teaching hospital, that way I would be able to help young students further their education in medicine. Also I would like to do research to further our knowledge of the human brain, as well as look into new treatments that could cure diseases that currently have no cure.

These plans will not happen overnight and they may never happen at all. This is what I want for my future right now. I know that things change I need to be adaptable. I may decide that my calling isn't biochemistry but economics or when I am teaching in third world countries I may realize that I want to become a teacher not a doctor or after medical school and residency I could realize that I want to join doctors without borders and provide medical care to regions with people in need. My future career plans may change completely but I am okay with that as long as I am doing something I love and care about.
SLyn 1 / 4  
Oct 23, 2011   #2
It is difficult to know what you want to do for the rest of your life when you are only 17 years old., and even more difficult to put it into writing.

Growing up I was never really sure what I wanted to be, but I always knew that it was going to be something in science.

I think that's a better introduction but it the ending of it could be better.

In 8th grade I really enjoyed learning and studying in love with biology, mainly the aspect of the human body aspect and genetics.
It put me in quite a dilemma. for a little bit

Confusing sentence - When I began my search for colleges I realized that somebody had already solved this problem for me though the major of biochemistry

I feel that it is important to be well rounded so I would like to go to Thailand of a year toand teach students English tostudents for a year.

I believe that this experience will provide me withwill valuable skills and knowledge that I could use for the rest of my life.

For example, I would be exposed to a different culture and way of life that would open up my mind to the different thoughts and beliefs of people around the world.

Once I have completed my fellowship I wouldwill be able to get a jobs working at a hospital as a surgeonwork as a surgeon at a hospital.

Run on sentence -
This is what I want for my future right now. I know that things change I need to be adaptable. I may decide that my calling isn't biochemistry but economics or when I am teaching in third world countries I may realize that I want to become a teacher not a doctor or after medical school and residency I could realize that I want to join doctors without borders and provide medical care to regions with people in need.
yihrenliu 1 / 14  
Oct 23, 2011   #3
I feel like you have a very generic opening sentence...perhaps you can make a more grabby hook, such as what you dream to be, or just start off with a dream of you pursuing your goals! Your overall essay is literally a list compiled into sentence form, after a certain point. I'm pretty sure that even if you're not sure, just stick to one thing, really. especially in the end when you just say, "i really don't know what gonna happen, or what I'm really gonna do, this is all just a really really vague speculation." This conclusion is really weak, stick to one thing, be passionate about it, and I'm sure you can win that scholarship!
manishchandra 2 / 5  
Oct 23, 2011   #4
It is difficult to know what you want to do for the rest of your life when you are only 17 years old. , and even more difficult to put it into writing . Growing up I was never really sure what I wanted to be, but I always knew that it was going to be something in science. In 8th grade I really enjoyed learning and studying in love with biology, mainly the human body aspect and genetics. For a couple of years I thought that I wanted to be a genetic counselor or a geneticist. Then in 10th and 11th grade I fell in love with chemistry. It put me in quite a dilemma for a little bit. What was I going to do and what was I going to study, chemistry or biology?

When I began my search for colleges I realized that somebody had already solved this problem for me though the what I can do with major in biochemistry. I can go to medical school or into a graduate program for chemistry or biology. Then it would be possible for me to get a job working work in a lab, or doing do research, I could be a professor and teach, or even become a doctor.

Right now I see myself going to college to obtain a 4 year degree in biochemistry. After I complete my Bachelors degree in Biochemistry I would like to do something different and unique.

Please try rewriting these two paragraph with more focussed approach than a wandering approach. Because in initial paragraphs you are not sure what you want to do but in this paragraph you appear to be focussed on deing a doctor and in surgical speciality.

These plans will not happen overnight and they may never happen at all. This is what I want for my future right now. I know that things change I need to be adaptable. I may decide that my calling isn't biochemistry but economics or when I am teaching in third world countries I may realize that I want to become a teacher not a doctor or after medical school and residency I could realize that I want to join doctors without borders and provide medical care to regions with people in need. My future career plans may change completely but I am okay with that as long as I am doing something I love and care about.


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