Can anyone help me to correcting my essay. Is this strong enough to pass scholarship selection?
Question One: What skills and knowledge do you hope to gain from your proposed study? (max. 250 words)
Reaching a new level
My accomplishment of knowledge in the field of geology and laboratory skills is still restricted. Therefore, I am looking for an advanced level in such area to inspiring myself for new levels of thinking with one of the postgraduate qualifications. Furthermore, I have found out a lot of your institution research environment in details that match my proposed study, as well as to expand my research skills. These modern facilities that coupled with sophisticated tools and professional expertise teaching will provide me the opportunity to conduct the advanced investigation in the fieldwork and lab dedicated in different areas such as resource management, hydrogeology, coastal management, mineral exploration, petroleum exploration, engineering geology, natural hazards research and meteorology. I think this program is could be the best selective for me to build up my personal quality, my academic research competence and professional career for further intensified of geological field and laboratory research. In addition, this program aligned me to strengthen different soft skills, which are very important for my future success such as communication skill through presentations, discussion, working in a multiple culture with enormous students coming from different qualifications, different experiences and numerous cultures. Based on the direct supervising and guidance of the expert that empower in Master Program at the University of Auckland will absolutely enabling me to deepen and expand my understanding in the field of geology successfully in progress.
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