Prompt
Discuss your short and long-term goals. Are some of them related? Which are priorities?
Goals are the stepping stones to a brighter future. Goals encourage people to turn their perspective of the future into reality. Throughout my life I've been setting goals to help organize my time, and to take pride in the achievement of my goals. Each and every one of my goals are dependent on each other, and will help me create the future I imagined.
During my years in high school I've created my own short term goals. My short term goals are little links that will help setup my future. One of my short term goals is to always attain an 85 or higher average. Actions speak louder than words, so instead of just saying I'm going to achieve an 85 or higher I began to work for it. I study long countless hours, and attend tutoring to assure that my work is above average. I also have to have more self-confidence in because without it results in poor grades. Every time I work hard for my grades I always receive my report card, which smiles back at me with above an 85. Another one of my short term goals is to graduate from Bedford Academy High school. Over the years I've pushed myself in each and every one of my classes making sure I won't fail, so I can graduate. I've taken all of my regents that's required for me to graduate plus extra, so I can graduate with an advanced regent's diploma. Each year around the time of the regents my school has Saturday tutoring called "9 to 9", which requires you to stay in school for 12 hours in one class, preparing you on the subject you are taking the regents on. Attending these "9 to 9's" helped me gain knowledge on topics that I forgot, or topics that was unclear to me. Even those these "9 to 9's" were extremely and left me whipped-out I passed all of my regents, which will contribute to me graduated with and advance regents diploma. Another short term goal I have is to attend college. I would like to further my education so I can become a lawyer. I would also like to achieve this goal because no one in my family went to college. Since this my senior year in high school I've been focused on achieving this goal. Instead of hanging out with my friends I decided to stay home and perfect my personal statement. I applied to all of the colleges of my choice, and visited some also. Attending college and getting high grades are priorities. I want to achieve this goal not only for my family but also for me.
Similar to my short term goals, my long term goals are my main priorities. My first long term goal is to graduate from college. I will work hard to achieve this goal because I do not want to sell my self short. Graduating from college will lead me one step closer to my goal of becoming a lawyer. Another one of my goals is to get into a good law school, and graduate from their as well. Many people in my life believe that I will drop out of law school because the work is difficult and I will like to prove them wrong. When times get tough I will push through so I can accomplish this goal. A long term I will also like to achieve is becoming a lawyer. I want to become a lawyer because I've seen a lot of my peers go to jail because of lawyers that were incompetent, and I will like to be lawyer who dedicates herself to her clients, and serve justice. To make sure I achieve this goal I interned at the U.S District Attorney's Office so I can observe the lifestyle of an attorney and get a feel of what it's like. Interning at the U.S District Attorney's office will contribute to turning my dream of becoming a lawyer into reality.
Without setting goals I would seem adrift in the world. I would feel like I'm working hard but not getting anywhere. Each of my goals helped me concentrate on what I want in life. Every one of my goals are priorities in which I take pride in achieving. I continue to have a positive attitude, self-confidence, and the right mentality to push me forward.
During my years in high school, I've created my own short term goals.
[quote=mimiallen]I also have to have more self-confidence in because without it results in poor grades.[/quote
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Ok. I lost interest before I even got to the third paragraph. You pretty much laundry listed, I want to get good grades...i want to graduate high school...i want to graduate from college...i want to be a lawyer. Nice and dandy, I have nothing against your goals but make your paragraphs more appealing.
Your intro paragraph was ok,but when a reader has to read thousands of essays you want something eye-catching when you read it. Just get straight to the point.
Hey I think your essay is pretty cool :) One thing that I would recommend you to do is, take out the contractions. My English teacher said it's improper to use contractions in an essay. But other than that awesome!!! and hey your from New york Me Too I'm getting my advanced regents diploma as well and I am applying for the millennium gates scholarship :) I'm using your essay as a guide !
Good luck girl :)
