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Jun 24, 2021   #1

Study plans to improve foreign languages skills

Study plans to improve foreign languages(Korean, English, etc) required for taking a degree course BEFORE and AFTER you come

Hello, i need feedback about my essay
since my english isn't my first language, i need your review so much

Before come to Korea, I have loved learning foreign language by keep an eye on television show without subtitle. I went to online tests by using HSK Online and BritishScore application for free, I got HSK Level 4 and 5.5 for IELTS overall band score. Able to communicate with whom have contrast background with, sounds interesting. I believe language that I picked up will mass helpfully, considering Korean influenced much by Mandarin and English. I still studied Hangeul, Batchim, Particles, and Grammar of Korean. I increase my vocabulary using Sejong Korean Vocabulary App and Analyzing books with the Korean books literacy community.

After come to Korea, I want to keep evolving my Mandarin and English, while I concentrated on Korean. To increase my vocabulary, I plan to read books and watch k-movies/k-dramas. In addition, I also wanted to interact and learn from one another who can understand Mandarin, English, and especially Korean to allow for more natural language abilities. Not to forget the Korean literacy community I joined, I wanted to help those who need guidance. And of course, unawares keep up with language class and keep better from any weakness.
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Jun 25, 2021   #2
The English language used in this essay shows a high level of English grammar inefficiency. It is in bad need of professional editing services to at least, help convince the reviewer that you actually got a barely passing score of 5.5 in your IELTS test. It would actually be better if you don't mention that score here anymore since it won't help in considering your application. It is only the score one gets in the TOPIK test that would be worth a mention in this presentation. You failed to mention how you will academically pursue grammar improvements. This makes it sound like you will spend most of your time engaging in self - entertainment, which defeats the purpose of coming to Korea to study.
heyaaami 2 / 4  
Jun 25, 2021   #3
before coming to
by keeping
after coming
OP dxqos 1 / 1  
Jun 25, 2021   #4
Thankyou for your review and advice!
Harinn 2 / 5  
Jun 27, 2021   #5
Your essay has many errors so I think you should try to write a new one with clear grammar.