Hi guys, I'm currently working on my chevening application.I would totally appreciate if any of you can help correcting my grammatical error and give me some advice regarding my writing. Thank you in advance!
LEADERSHIP AND INFLUENCE QUESTION
Even since when I was young, I was a tomboy girl, I always stand up front if there're people who bully my older sister and younger brother. My mom raised me to become someone who is independent since she is always busy with work and rarely home. I think that what makes me like to taking care people and lead people.
Since in elementary school, I loved being class representative. Something about leading and guiding people is fascinating and challenging. Though I am not really active participating in any organization, I've joined youth red cross when I was in junior high school where I met many new people and gained experiences about social activities and also how to communicate with various personalities of people. Aside from organization, whenever there is opportunity for being event committee I always try to join, for example being a member committee of art and cultural event in my high school.
I think the greatest influence of leadership experience in my life was when I was elected as head of student organization in my university, Karawitan Jawi. Karawitan Jawi is the one and only art and cultural organization which focusing in traditional music and culture in my university. From this experience, I learned how to deal and work with many people. Even though my organization is not a big one nor it had hundreds of member, it has many yearly events. I had to manage board members to achieve our work programs and in the same time I have to deal with list of events, create committees for each event. As the head of the organization, I kept trying to make, as many as possible, my board members to gain experience being leader by assigning different people to lead our event committees. This experience help me to developed strong work ethic, interpersonal skills, and the ability to solve problems.
The organizational experiences is really helping me in my current job as an audit associate 2. Because perform auditing is basically a team work. I have several audit teams in various clients, which means team work and work ethic is really needed, and also with my solid base of organization experiences I can always communicate well with my team members and clients. As an associate 2, I am expected to be able guiding junior who is in my below level. Working as an auditor help me to overcome with mutual sharing and decision making with my team mate, and how to keep good communication within clients.
And I believe it's time for me to pursuit my other passion about earth and environment. In which I believe, Chevening scholarship offers me a great opportunity for me able to learn more about how can I help the earth and environment by taking masters in sustainability program. And I believe if I can achieve my goal learning about sustainability it will equip me to be able lead and influence the society into positive direction.
Hello, MeRise
I would give you corrections for your essay
1. I always stand up front if there're (there are ) people
2. I think that what makes me like to taking (take ) care people and lead people. The to-infinitive that follows the verb like requires the base form. Change taking to the base form.
3. and in (at ) the same time I have to deal with list of events. It appears that in is not the right preposition to use in this context.
4. This experience help (helps ) me to developed strong work ethic. The plural verb help does not appear to agree with the singular subject This experience.
5. The organizational experiences is (are ) really helping me in my current job. The singular verb is does not appear to agree with the plural subject experiences.
Thank you
