My mother worked hard all her life to give my brother and me a better life.
Try to say this in different words. It sounds like a cliche.
I love the first one... very well-written. But this intro is confusing:
While I finally found out what had been causing my constant absences in school, I learned about the meaning of strength. ( I think you can add a phrase to this sentence, or add a short sentence after this sentence, to answer the question in the reader's mind. What was causing the absences?
Being Cherokee Indian gives me patience and level headiness. French brings me more elegance.
Very cool!!
In all 3 of these, try to add some discussion of your plan. In every part of the application, make it as though you are so focused on your plan for the next few years that you cannot help talking in terms of the plan whenever you express yourself. Be totally focused on the plan. These qualities are significant only in relation to what you do in life, so... focus on your deadlines, goals, plans...
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