Scholarship Essay about how important the punishment is itself for educated a children.

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this caption?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use of teach good behavior to children.

education and learning with the use of punishment

Nowadays, a gadget can accessable through a wide range of ages. Especially for the offsprings. Unfortunately, many children engaged with their gadget all day and forgot their responsibility at school and ignore anything. Others, might think to allowed their kids to play with a gadget instead of banned it. It could damage their behavior. In the following paragraph, I will elaborated how important the punishment is to this case and kind of punishment that must treated.

Punishment is aimed to educated the children's habits with different approach by providing some rules. There are many kind of punishment that can be adapted. But we concern on moral/logical punishment instead of physical/harsh punishment. For a children who earned their day with gadget and forgot their responsibility, parents must took their gadget during a week day and provide it in a week end. We must limited their hours with gadget. Play with gadget might harm their study furthermore decreased their performances at school.

Moral/Logical punishment allowed a kids to know and understand which is right and wrong by providing some advice and surrounded their life with a good activity. Despite providing acces to a gadget, we must strict a rule on it so they know their limit. Inspite of having a chance to conduct a punishment, we got another way to educates our son. It is not necessary to punished our children, however. As a parents, we can prevent any bad things that can influence our children by spending more time with them, take a short tour to educational place, put a control on their activity and also limit the access to their gadget. All of this things can accelerated and enhance their ability to understand which is right and not and influence their behavior. Parents have a big role in this part. Parents must give a good example and strict a rule on it.

To conclude with, punishment is needed in order to educated the children into a good behavior. One kind of punishment that can adapted is moral/logical punishment. We can also prevent the punishment by putting control on their activity and spending more time with them.

@Riyan Mudastsir
Hi Riyan.
First thing first, I don't understand about your introductory paragraph.
It is quite confusing for me because I think the question is about moral value for the infant, but your answer is about gadget.
Maybe you can describe it first and I can come up with another suggestions.

Riyan, by improperly stating the prompt in the paraphrased portion of the opening statement, you have officially failed the task accuracy portion of this essay. Then, because you followed up the discussion using the wrong prompt information, you also succeeded in failing the rest of the test. After all, you cannot be scored a passing mark in terms of cohesiveness and coherence as well as grammar range and accuracy when you have shown that you did not understand the prompt instructions at all. The use of gadgets have nothing to do with the essay and yet, you created that discussion as a focal point of the essay. That is an automatic failure in this test. The actual discussion was all about whether or not it is important to punish a child in order to learn right from wrong. Along with that, you were expected to suggest a non harmful way of punishing the child and explain why you believe such a punishment will work. So the first you should have done was restate the prompt in your own manner, then agree or disagree with the caption, then suggest a course of punishment and why you suggest it. That was the outline of the discussion expected for the instructions you were provided. In my opinion, you would never past the test using this discussion.