Chevening is looking for individuals with strong networking skills, who will engage with the Chevening community and influence and lead others in their chosen profession. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your networking skills, and outline how you hope to use these skills in the future.
The most recent accomplishment which required my networking skill was made when I volunteered myself in helping a small and conservative business to further expand its narrow market. They are a small company that produce hand-making gift box with limited machinery aid. After some studies and researches regarding the business nature, I implemented a new way to generate more income by selling their adhesive products and papers for business diversification. I appointed a team to expand the company's networking by assigning them to different tasks:
Marketing, to get new clients- distribute brochures at related exhibitions, place advertisement in leading newspapers.
IT, leverage social media - create a website online, introduce the company, review company reputation, email to new potential clients, and promote business via Facebook and Twitter.
To motivate the team for better performance, I successfully pursuit the business owner to remunerate the team members by commissions when the target growth achieved. In two months' time, they have an added list of new clients and significantly increased revenue, and the business owner is very pleased and keen to keep this new trend of operation management.
Before utilizing my networking skill for the business need, I already started to gain this skill during my university time. I joined a voluntary organization that focus on raising awareness of education needs in rural area. Many families in rural area are struggling for living and consequently ignore the importance of education of their child. I was multi-tasked to raise funds and organize campaigns. By contributing effective ideas in getting sponsorship and publicity, we manage to collect a significant amount of funds and attracted more university students to join us.
We played different roles in that program, and I was entrusted to inspire and mentor a group of student that aged 12-17 to further study. I led my team to deliver messages to both parents and children regarding pathways to higher education by setting up seminars, family visits, games and competitions. We have built up a good and long-term relationship with the villagers. 80% of the student in that village are now enrolling to local colleges or government universities which shows a tremendously growth compared to 12 years back. I am still committed to this community care as I wish to continue my influence for better national economic development where the well-educated workforce is the key.
I believe Chevening will make me a very good example that good education is not only for wealthy and lucky people but for those who work hard and ambitious too.
Hi Choyhar,
Welcome to EF :)
Here's my analysis towards your essay. I hope you can follow through.
1st paragraph:
- I volunteered myself in helping a small and conservative...
They areIt isa small company that produceShand-makinghandmade gift box... (singular/plural issues)
- ...generate more income by selling theirits adhesive products and papers for...
- From thisI appointed a team...to this...new trend of operation management.the organization of your paragraph was quite messy. Therefore, I have an alternative modifications below.
I chose a team to expand the company's networking by assigning them into two distinctive tasks:
- The first one is marketing. Their job is to get new clients, distribute brochures at related exhibitions, and place advertisement in leading newspapers.
- Information Technology is their second task. They have to leverage social media, create an online website, introduce the company, review company reputation, email to new potential clients, and promote business via Facebook and Twitter.
However, in order to motivate the team in increasing its performance, I successfully pursue the business owner to remunerate the team members by giving commissions when the target growth is achieved. Thus, they have an added list of new clients and significantly increased revenue in only two months. This makes the business owner is very pleased and keen to keep this new trend of operation management.
Hope this helps :)
There is only thing I would like to suggest and that is to change "create websites online" to just "create website"
Hi Choy, indeed, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we hope to be able to provide you with the most accurate and credible feedback on your essays especially with this crucial Chevening Scholarship.
As scary as it sounds, Chevening scholarship is a much sought after scholarship there is in the Academic world, having said that, I must say that you have managed your writing very well, you absolutely started strong, you managed to showcase your strength, your goals and the process that you want to take in order to achieve this goals.
Now as much as I love the strength of the first 4 paragraphs of your essay, I believe the last paragraph can still be enhanced.Having said that, please find
the corrections below.
- I believe Chevening will make me a very good example thatis a living proof that good education is not only for wealthy and luckymost privileged people but for those who work hard and ambitiouswill driven too.
There you have it Choy, I hope the above remarks strengthen the conclusive part of your scholarship. Do let us know what comes out of this application, we'd love to hear from you. The best of luck Choy!
a millions thanks to both ichanpants89 and Ivy!
Yes, indeed, Chevening scholarship is so so so much sought after!
I still have a long way to go~~
thanks again!
Choyhar
Hi Choy, it's great to hear from you and thank you for appreciating our work here on EF, I know it's going to be a long road for you to take in pursuing your academic goal, but hey, you made a good start here so the goal should not be far behind.
What's good about your writing is the fact that you are very specific, you have the words, "I believe", "I know" and this are just examples of words that gives you an edge from applicants who are not sure of what they really want to do or their definite purpose in applying for the scholarship.
Overall, you are in a very definite track that will hopefully yield good results in the end. Furthermore, I still suggest that you keep writing, keep reading good English literatures, do a healthy comparison of your work, this way you will be able to critique your own work, thus, opening windows for you to get better at this craft. Keep writing Choy!
