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The Journey of Finding Myself - SCHOLARSHIP APPLICATION ESSAY



ha phuong linh 1 / 1  
Feb 20, 2026   #1
Prompt: "Share a story of personal resilience."
Requirements for the speech: Personal introduction, expressive delivery, and creativity.
Dear FPT University Admissions Board, my name is Ngo Van Tien, a student from Hiep Hoa No. 4 High School. Today, I would like to share my journey of 'finding myself.'
Perhaps each of us has a milestone that defines who we are. For me, that moment was in August 2023, when I received my high school admission results. It was more than just the fruit of tireless studying; it was the moment I realized I had escaped a 'living hell.' Throughout my four years of middle school, I was a victim of school bullying. Every day was an endless battle against toxic words and actions from peers, and even from some teachers. Those dark days left me physically and mentally exhausted, causing my academic performance to plummet.

Unlike the tragic story of the 'Rose Boy' Yeh Yung-chih, who chose a permanent departure to protest against injustice, I chose a different path. I used knowledge to heal and illuminate my scarred soul, for I have always believed that 'knowledge can change one's destiny,' as shared by Professor Nguyen Lan Dung in his book 'Knowledge is Power.'

From then on, I buried myself in books, often until 2 AM, fueled by the conviction that 'the universe always listens to a stubborn heart' (Madison Anderson). Perhaps the universe did hear the wounded heart of that 14-year-old boy; against all odds, I passed the entrance exam with an impressively high score.

Those experiences have forged the courage and resilience I carry today as I stand here to share my story with you. I have decided to choose FPT University to spread my wings, majoring in International Business. I believe this is a place that not only 'respects differences' but also empowers individuals to create 'something special' for the community
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 16060  
Feb 21, 2026   #2
I do not feel like you were confident enough to share your true journey towards finding yourself. The back story is lacking. Bullying was mentioned but the kind of bullying was neglected so it does not make sense that you decided to hide behind books and learning to get away from it. There are too many quotes from other people, without a direct relation to a personal event or experience for you to take ownership of the statement. Why you would claim to have passed the test against all odds is also a question mark. Overall, the statement does not give an insight into your world and how you journeyed to find yourself. It is always mentioning a subject, but not properly developing the discussion in relation to the point of the essay / speech.
OP ha phuong linh 1 / 1  
Feb 21, 2026   #3
@Holt
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