The wide consensus that scholarship is a very difficult thing to get has impelled me to think about why I deserve Zion International Graduate Award. And I have come up with pretty good reasons for my belief that I deserve this award. Let me briefly summarize my background that motivated me to apply for this programme.
.... I feel this is not so strong as your opening paragraph, especially the ideas... I don't see much value addition in that :(
Despite of my parents' request, I left my hometown to study in the Neo city.
.... I feel this gives a better start ... :)
and the reason being able to join the only robotics club in the whole nation at that time.
But amid 8 hours of electricity per day here in republic
... I don't get you idea here :(
Thus, I couldn't get the final installment of the fund from the scholarship.
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This deprived me of the final installment of the scholarship funds.You write well :)