I'm going to apply the next year, so I hope there will be room for improvement. Any kind of feedback is seriously well received :)
KGSP personal statement
- Motivations with which you apply for this program
- Family and Education background
- Significant experiences you have had; risks you have taken and achievements you have made, persons or events that have had a significant influence on you
- Extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences
- If applicable, describe awards you have received, publications you have made, or skills you have acquired, etc.
I come from a nuclear family of five members where education and the importance of academic life have always been present. My father has always told me and my brother that the most important thing he wants to leave us is our education and that we will always have his support in that matter, on the other hand, my mother being the only one among her seven siblings who managed to graduate from university as a lawyer, represents a really big inspiration for me.
Thanks to all their support and dedication, it is that from a very early age I enjoy my time at school and I express it by trying my best, not only as a mere knowledge bank, for me any educational institution is more than that, it is an opportunity to open the doors to new realities and experiences that awaken in people a real interest in the subjects studied, that is why my third year marked a crucial point in my life, that was the first year in which I was taught physics as a subject and I discovered the hidden passion I had.
In the field of physics I see a versatile and significant vocation, among the variety of good points that I find in it, what I would remark the most is its way of harmoniously mix everything that happens in the tangible world, both microscopic and macroscopic, with a science as complex as mathematics, drawing from that combination a set of bases that, converted into theorems, form the fundamental laws of our existence.
And while I continued to be amazed by all the knowledge I acquired in the classes, it was almost impossible for me to ignore the fact that I had only two years left to start my higher studies at a university, an amount for time that for me, someone who prefers to always be prepared and having time to do the things right was not enough.
It was during those months of searching for study options that would match what I wanted in a University and for my future I met the GKS program (formerly KGSP) that I became more interested in the korean culture, after researching more about it I just loved everything I saw, I think it is a country and society I could easily fit into.
I compared what GKS could give me in terms of opportunities in my future work and at the moment of comparing it with other programs I decided that GKS was definitely what I wanted to aim for, not only for the clear economic benefits, but also because of the point that seemed more interesting for me, the korean classes before the degree was such an amazing part of the program for me because something that I always appreciate is to have access to different way of thinking, writing and new mindsets, that are easy to find when you learn about a new culture like the korean one, and for me learning korean and also being immersed in their country would be for sure an amazing opportunity not only to form my knowledge but also myself and my point of view of the world.
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on the other hand,
I would not use this word in the paragraph. It connotes that the mother has an opposing idea or does not support the applicant's ambitions. Since that is not what the succeeding thoughts were, the sentence should be rephrased to be more positive in indication, strengthening and widening the influence of the mother in the statement since she is a person with an important and character influencing position in the family.
In totality, the essay is very basic in information and misses out on several key elements from the prompt that are necessary for the consideration of the applicant.By not addressing the academic accomplishements and exposure / skills development in Physics, the applicant does not establish his preparedness to take the course that he has chosen.
for the clear economic benefits
Never discuss money or refer to it when trying to qualify for the scholarship. Look for the strengths one has, based on the discussion requirements, that will emphasize the readiness of this candidate to study the course and what Korea can offer in terms of his development as student and future professional. These elements are missing from this application.