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Leadership.Football, School, Family


chuncky13 8 / 13  
Jan 8, 2010   #1
discuss a leadership experience you have had in any area of your life: school, work, athletics, family, church, community, etc. how and why did you become a leader in this area? how did this experience influence you goals?

A leader is a person who guides others toward a common goal, by example and showing that you are a good listener, focused, organized, decisive, and a confident person. I would consider myself a leader at school on the football team and amongst my peers academically, and a leader at home amongst my family members.

The football team at Robinson High School has had a losing record for a couple of years, ending up with records of 1-9 and 2-8 in 2007 and 2008, respectively. Inexcusably, we were known as the worst football team in Tampa. One day, the juniors, future seniors, of the football team huddled up and each individual spoke with their heart, preaching that we need to turn this program around. Progressively, the seniors inspired the rookies and encouraged them to try their hardest.. We taught them to how to get out of their comfort zones, so they could see what they were capable of doing. We were a group of nine seniors, and we had to have a firm foot in the ground so that we could set an example for the thirty underclassmen on our team. For example, we were never late to practice, but if any underclassmen were to be late we would have a talk with them. We would ask them if they cared for the rest of the team, or if they even wanted to play. Asking them little questions like those two, would get into their heads and make them think if football was really worth it. Almost every time the talks worked and they were never late again.

After eight months of off season training, scolding, teaching, learning, running dieting, working, drilling, hitting, and hurting, our team, including our coaches, became a family and went 10-3, reaching the State Semi-finalists in the 2A-Florida division.. Losing to such a great team in the end, when we were so close the State Title, devastated everyone. The seniors told the rest of the team that they needed to take this feeling and strive on it, in order to be successful the year coming. This was my family, and we seniors lead the pack, in every aspect, We had a very good season that sparked greatness for years to come. I became a senior leader on the football team so that we would be successful and turn program around.

My school isn't a big school, it has approximately 400 seniors. Everybody is acquainted with one another. There are no cliques or labels branded on people, and that's what makes it such a great place. Throughout high school, late nights, online classes, Advanced Placement classes, and the Dual Enrollment Program were common things in my life. All of these factors, have lead me to earn my position of 2nd in my senior class. I have struggled and worked extremely hard to get where I am today.

I am a student that takes school seriously. I picture myself as a leader amongst my peers because I exhibit the qualities of a leader. Also because of my hard work and determination to accomplish my goals, my peers look up to me. Jumping from the rank of 23rd in my freshman class to 2nd in my senior class also shows that school is extremely important to me. I became a senior leader at school, to show that anyone can do what they put their minds to.

In my family, I might not be a leader, authority wise, but I am a leader when it comes to academics. Ever since I could remember, I have been helping the younger children in my family with their studies. Whenever there is a problem that they can't figure out, I am always there to help. For example, my cousin, Aaron, I would consider him my little brother, is in the fourth grade and he is not the brightest student. Everyday because his mother has to work in order to pay her bills, I help him with his studies. I wanted to become a leader amongst my family because I wanted the younger children to look up to. I wanted to show them that if they put their minds to it they can become anything they want to.

My experiences as a leader in these three areas, have deeply influenced my goals. Since I decided to step up and show people who I really was , I realized if I really work hared I

can do or be anything I want.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 9, 2010   #2
A leader is a person who guides others toward a common goal, by example and showing that you are a good listener, focused, organized, decisive, and a confident person.

Above, this should be 2 sentences instead of one. The first sentence gives your definition of "leader," and the second tells the attributes you think are necessary.

note: one famous definition of leadership is "the fulfillment of organizational goals through the direction of human assistance." -- W.H. C. Prentice

I would consider myself a leader at school on the football team and amongst my peers academically, and a leader at home amongst my family members.----you said this without backing up any part of the claim. I assume you will back it up in the rest of the essay, but I think you need to add some explanation to paragraph 1. (be careful: If you live with your parents, it is very hard to call yourself a leader at home. By definition, your parents are the leaders if they are the ones keeping everyone okay...)

Oh, I see later that you discuss tutoring younger siblings. So, in the first para you should SPECIFY that tutoring is what you mean. You should really add to the first an last paragraph of the essay in order to convey a THEME, a memorable idea to be associated with your essay.

Ever since As far back as I can remember, I have been helping the younger children in my family with their studies. Whenever there is a problem that they can't figure out, I am always there to help. (not necessary, waste of words) For example, my cousin, Aaron (I would consider him my little brother), is in the fourth grade and he is not the brightest student. (don't say bad things about anyone in this essay! just say he struggled for a while in the fourth grade.)

Yes, the most important thing is to mention a memorable theme that will linger in the reader's mind. Forward the theme in the first and last para.

:-)
OP chuncky13 8 / 13  
Jan 9, 2010   #3
thanx i really appreciate this
you dnt kno how much this means to me


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