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Leadership is a skill that I improved by participating in many activities through stages of my life


Haneen Ali 2 / 3  
Oct 28, 2016   #1
i realy want your help to give comments on my answer at this question
( Chevening is looking for individuals that will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer )

Leadership is a skill that i improved by participating in many activities through different stages of my life , step after step I was learning more things and I hope I could help people and influence my society to make even small changes .

1- My real starting point was at high school
I was the president of student's union in my school ( 2006 - 2007 )
it was my first experiment to be responsible for the connection between students and the school administration .
I learned how to manage my time to do my responsibilities and study hard and how to be diplomatic to solve the student's problems .

2- At the same year , I was the head of the student's parliament .I can help in the success of my school in parliament competition as I was responsible for the organization and training of the parliament team .

3- After what I have learned from those experiences I become the head of Anti-addiction group at the next year through which we did a lot of activities to aware teenagers with the danger of addiction .

At university , it was the time for more big activities :
1-One of the most important experiences was to be a co-founder of a student's community called ( Better Tomorrow ) and I was also the assistant leader of it for three years ( 2010 - 2013 ) .

through this community I participated in changing the prospective of our faculty about volunteering through our activities .
we helped a lot of new students to know the faculty through our welcoming activities every year .

2- I was also member of student's union ( cultural committee ) 2012 .
I was responsible for issued faculty magazine which was the window of student's to express their ideas and their talents .

3-And the most creative experience was to be the head of design committee in ( Fun Science Day ) activity ( 2013 ) .
It was a student initiative launched from our faculty to explain scientific theories in simple funny way .
my committee was responsible for the design of the event , and to find a way to show every theory . we helped all students especially dental students to understand things they study and can't imagine it .

After graduation it doesn't mean to stop improving my skills
I'm the head of human resource committee in cultural team in my state called ( knowledge / Marfa ) from July 2015 till now .
we helped to spread knowledge through our state by held knowledge circles where every one share his experience in specific subject with others .
through my committee I learned how to motivate members , give every member the suitable mission and help them to explore their skills .

it is part of my experience in Leadership which I'm sure it won't stop here .
sydneynguyen 6 / 16 2  
Oct 28, 2016   #2
dear friend,
You wrote: ... at high school I was the president of students' union ...

"at high school" at "a high school"You have used a possessive form where you probably need a plural. Revise: ''students''.

You wrote : At the same year , I was the head of ...

Revise : in the same year

You wrote : which we did a lot of activities to aware ...

Revise : ... activities for aware teenagers with the danger of addiction .

You wrote: ... it was the time for more big activities...

English has two comparative adjective forms. Add -er to the end of one or two syllable adjectives. Use 'more' with longer adjectives. In this case, drop the word 'more' and simply write ''bigger'

I was also a member of student's union
OP Haneen Ali 2 / 3  
Oct 29, 2016   #3
@sydneynguyen

thanks a lot for your help
Medo91 4 / 10 3  
Oct 29, 2016   #4
Hello Haneen,

my point of view would be to make your answer looks more like an essay since you have many previous experiences where you fulfilled the position of a leader. I advise you to rebuild the structure of the sentences by making it looks more complex than just a statement.

you have been through significant positions and they will be more effective if you present them in the best style.

Good luck


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