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My lifetime goal is to become a Registered Nurse--grammar essay check


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Oct 25, 2013   #1
Can someone check my essay for grammar please

My lifetime goal is to become a Registered Nurse. Every since I was 18 I've been working in the health care field as a Home Health Aide and at the age of 20 I've been working as a Certified Nurse Assistant. For many years I been working with great Registered Nurses at various nursing facilities, assisting living facilities for alzhemeirs patients, and providing care for patients at their private homes. I love working in the medical field because I'm very compassionate, love providing health care to others, and have an opportunity in utilizing my skills to give back to the community. My goal is to further my education in order for me to get a degree in Nursing, work as a Registered Nurse, and become an owner of a health care agency to have and opportunity in providing the best possible health care to those that are in need.

Being a Registered Nurse is a wonderful career choice with amazing responsibilities. While working alongside Registered Nurses at various nursing facilities, I gain a lot of respect to Registered Nurses seeing them take on demanding tasks in order them to provide great health care to patients. I take pride and honor in working alongside great nurses as a Certified Nurse Assistant. While I worked with Registered Nurses we communicate effectively in order to be on the same page while providing care. During health care, communication is the key in the workforce as a result I gained significant amount of communication skills by talking to patients and nurses. Taking on the task to help patients with ambulation, change an incontinent patient, performing vitals sign checks, assisting with insulin shots, and assist with daily living, give me a sense of pride in me having the opportunity in providing health care and inspire me to become a Registered Nurse.

My goals is to continue my education and get my college degree in Nursing. I'm planning to achieve my goals by working part time and going to school full time in order for me to have enough time to study and excel in my academic areas. I always wanted to become a nurse but I had to juggle with life obstacles and stress throughout the years, which include financial and family struggles. Even though life been rough on me, I always stayed positive and use my past struggles in life as a valuable lesson which motivated me more and more to continue my education in Nursing. My high school and college football coaches always said,"never give up", sending me a strong message that I took with me throughout my life. I stay positive no matter what that I know as long as I strive for my goal it will happen. I know its my calling to become a nurse. Every since I took care of my first patient I felt a sense of happiness and accomplishment in actually helping another human being. I would love to continue to have that same feeling each and every day while in return they receive care and comfort.

I really think I'm a good candidate for this scholarship because I have ten years of experience working as a Home Health Aide and Certified Nurse Assistant. Having years of experience working at various health care facilities, I'm very comfortable working in a health care setting. I strongly believe that a little help that goes towards my college tuition can make a big difference in helping me a lot and in return have a good impact in the community becoming and working as a Registered Nurse. If I get this scholarship not only it will lessen my financial hardship that I have to pay for my nursing education. By me receiving this scholarship I can continue my education to get a degree in Nursing and utilize my education and past health care work experience to provide the best health care possible.

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Oct 28, 2013   #2
My goals is to continue my education and get my college degree in Nursing.

Note that when you use plural forms, the verb should also be plural. Therefore it is advised that "my goals is" shall be corrected as "my goal is" .

Hope that helps. :)
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Nov 3, 2013   #3
EveryEver since I was 18 I've been working in the health care field as a Home Health Aide and at the age of 20 I've been working as a Certified Nurse Assistant.

I think you need to arrange these sentences in a more logical order. Start with how passionate you are about this field. Then say how you pursued it and what credentials or experiences you have achieved in this direction. Then tell what your future plans are.


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