Here's some more help ;)
Add this line to the previous para;Yes, why I aim for a scholarship? It is because my family cannot support me for a higher education for very valid reasons.
Now go to the next para;
Considering my family financial situation, I would never have chance to study abroad without scholarships and loan. Due to the fact that I am the first child in the three-child family, my abroad trip would be a heavy burden on my parents shoulder. Therefore, I decided to take up a student. Nevertheless, the loan which is limited is not sufficient without the scholarship. If I do not win this grant, it is compulsory for me to ask for help from my parents, which is no doubt that would increase onus on them when my little sister and brother are in needs of money for their education.
.... You need to tell them about your family's hardships... Like, only one person is employed or the parents are blue collars whose earning capacity is poor... elaborate on something like that! ... this is the start;I am the eldest child with two much younger siblings.