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LOM for International Masters of Science in Environmental Engineering

hadilakk 3 / 7 3  
Dec 16, 2019   #1
Hi Everyone,

I am currently applying to Erasmus Mundus Joint Masters in: International Masters of Science in Environmental Technology and Engineering (IMETE). I am attaching the requirements for the LOM and the questions that need to be addressed in the essay.

The following needs to be addressed in the motivation letter:

Reference to issues of Environmental Technology and Engineering in your country and/or worldwide;

Clear description of own qualifications and experience;

Specific reference to the IMETE study programme and objectives;

Coherence of own intended career with the IMETE study programme

(preferably the motivation letter should have a maximum of 1000 words).

My essay is about 900 words. I would like you guys to review this statement and let me know what you think about it. Does it addresses all the questions asked by the program? Is it impressive enough? Lastly, reading this essay what impression it creates about me as a potential student. I personally feel there is coherence related issue in this.

the letter of motivation

Growing up I listened to my father complaining more and more about decreasing crop yields because of polluted soil and water. Coming from a rural community in a small locality called Mandi-Bahauddin, generations of my family depended on organic farming. I grew up witnessing my family making the shift from organic to inorganic. Rapid urbanization led to heaps of solid waste accumulating in ground water. With no facilities of wastewater treatment or recycling, one could see landfills everywhere and 90% of the waste was plastic. I was devastated to see my hometown was slowly turning into a trash town. This devastation projected me to explore natural attenuation means, hence I decided to study Microbiology in my bachelors.

I was determined to create a promising future for my family and hometown, hence I left it behind to pursue my degree. GCU Lahore with its second highest ranking across the country, proved to be a place where I explored my true potential in environmental microbiology. I specifically took courses like Introduction to environmental sciences, Environmental microbiology and Soil microbiology which enabled me to focus on the kinds of clean-tech startups which could be the possible solutions to the plastic waste problem. While doing an assignment in the course management of infectious waste, I collected data on waste management from hospitals in my area, which suggested that most of the waste is wrapped in plastic which is ultimately dumped into water or landfills without treatment. Since then, I dream about running a startup that assorts plastic waste from water and utilizes the plastic for something better. To turn that dream into reality, I decided to begin with researching on a similar prospect. In my final year project, I utilized synthetic plastics to create a natural bacterial polymer that can potentially replace plastics. This research could practically be applied to manage and remove plastic waste from ground water by the production of an eco-friendly product. As the research is still nascent, it needs

further study in order to be run on a pilot scale. The local public, especially in remote areas like mine are unaware of the hazards of plastic waste. Meanwhile, to create awareness about the hazards of plastics, I volunteered with a student run organization called Plastic Free Pakistan. I delivered lectures in public schools on recycling of plastics, alternatives like cotton and paper bags and their distribution among local store owners to promote their use.

During my service as an Office Secretary at the Biological Society and other clubs, I co-organized tree plantation drives, awareness seminars on smog, biodiversity, fisheries and their protection, global warming, world wildlife day celebrations, fund-raisers for recurring flood disaster response and cleanup drive around the university where the waste was collected, assorted and disposed off to a composting plant run by the Lahore Waste Management Company. As a leader, I worked as a team head at TEDxGCULahore where I managed a team of volunteers from non-science areas.

In my masters, my proposed research will be to treat and extract microplastic polluted water streams for the production of a natural bioplastic polymer. Research carried out on green technologies at Ghent university, particularly in plastic waste conversion to quality end-products can be the perfect place for me to carry out my proposed research. With their state-of-the-art equipment and experts team, I can finally see my product reaching a real consumer market. Coming from a rural area where there are no female STEM entrepreneurs, I envision myself as a pioneer of a clean-tech startup in my area. I availed almost every opportunity I could to gain and receive recognition but unfortunately I could not find any entrepreneurial opportunities or trainings specifically designed for women from STEM fields. Through courses, trainings, entrepreneurship and networking opportunities with international experts from academia and industry during the IMETE programme, I might be able to attract funding opportunities for my proposed startup.

IMETE's courses like Environmental Microbiology and Engineering, Waste Management and Treatment and laboratory trainings would allow me to experience the actual applications of microbiology in environmental technologies which I have not experienced yet while living and studying here. However, I am most excited for the course of Wastewater treatment plant design and engineering where I will learn about plant design, its costs and start up. When I will comeback with this knowledge, it will help me to turn my dream of establishing such a facility in my area into reality. My long terms goals include running a wastewater treatment plant in Mandi-bahauddin that can later be expanded to a clean-tech bioplastic production facility. After the completion of this joint degree from three top-notch institutes, I intend to return to Pakistan as a skilled female environmental engineering professional and a creative researcher, who can aspire to drive more local women in science industries and female owned clean-tech startups in Pakistan.

Due to the impact that this plant can one day create, another generation of my family and many more families would continue their spirit of agriculture and female leadership. My city will finally see a greener and an empowered future. Indeed there are many years in the journey to this future, but it will be there. Who knows!

Maria - / 1,100 389  
Dec 16, 2019   #2
Thanks for coming to the forum once more. Here is my take on your writing.

While I think that it was great that you incorporated immediately in the first paragraph your background, you should have incorporated here a part that would address the immediate questions (what your intent for writing is). If you do this, it would give clarity to your writing.

I noticed as well that you immediately incorporated details about microbiology. I find this out-of-place, especially since you should try your best to distinguish details to create more distinctive organization.

Apart from these, I find that the writing sufficiently complies with the bare minimum requirements. I would only suggest working more on the technical angles of your writing: sentence composition, grammar, punctuation, and the like. These are noticeable concerns that you still have, especially when you're discussing more complex and career-specific details.
OP hadilakk 3 / 7 3  
Dec 17, 2019   #3
Thank you so much for the response. But I don't quiet understand what you mean by what your intent for writing is?

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