It hashad been present since the beginnings of history
Engineering is what makes the world prosper. It has been present since the beginnings of history-the invention of the wheel, the pulley, the lever-it is the very basis of day to day life.
All this sounds perfect. But it sounds like theory. Your presence is not their at all... It only talks about wisdom of engineering and that is not what the selection committee wants to know. What they want to know is why you want to pursue engineering?
In my view, you need to provide them with an answer of more personal nature.... How you got attracted to engineering? What aspects of engineering inspire you the most? etc.