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Master of Entrepreneurship and Innovation - AAS-Why did you choose?



nini_Maniva 1 / -  
Apr 17, 2025   #1
I have chosen the Master of Entrepreneurship and Innovation at the University of Queensland as my first choice because I see this field as a bridge between where Laos is today and the future I want to help build where small businesses, social enterprises and local entrepreneurs can thrive and create opportunities for others.

This interest didn't come from theory. It came from watching my own family work hard every day to keep a small printing and uniform produce business running, often with little guidance, limited resources and no roadmap to grow. They've always tried to give others a chance too including hiring people with disabilities. I didn't fully understand the value of what they were doing at first but over time, I realized how much potential there was not just in their business but in the idea that entrepreneurship could be a tool for inclusion and change.

My work at 108.jobs has deepened this belief. I've seen how youth in Laos struggle with unemployment, lack of skills and limited job access. I've also seen how disconnected many people are from the idea that they could start something of their own not because they lack talent but because they lack support. That's why I want to study this course to learn how to build systems, products and new ideas that actually work for people in Laos.

The University of Queensland offers exactly the kind of learning I need a practical program with a focus on real-world innovation, social impact and design thinking. I'm also considering the University of Melbourne, where the program focuses on entrepreneurial leadership and community-driven innovation. Both would give me the tools, mindset and network I need to return and make a contribution not only to my business for social and community but to the wider ecosystem of entrepreneurs, workers and young people in Laos who are still waiting for their chance.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15634  
Apr 17, 2025   #2
Your response does not show a familiarity with the university, its community, nor the course curriculum. There must be a parallelism between your educational background, your profession, and your desire for higher academic studies. This is a response that deviates from your personal insight and personal background as it requires an academic focus to be an effective response. I would strongly advise you to write a totally new response. Do not use this current version as it remains unapplicable to the prompt requirements. You mentioned the university option, but failed to mention and discuss what masters degree courses you are hoping to be enrolled in, per university. The overall essay shows that you do not understand the requirements of the scholarship, nor did you give ample thought to your university choices. A better and more relevant discussion response is necessary to better reflect your reasons for choosing the universities indicated.


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