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Medea from Jason and the Argonauts, Essay on One of the Mythological Characters


Envie 4 / 60  
Jan 5, 2010   #1
This is a piece I wrote for one of the local small scholarships; it's to write a story in the point of view of a mythology character. I chose the story of Medea from Jason and the Argonauts. The scoring system is based on accuracy as well so my essay (I think) reflects on that (meaning, I didn't make the facts up other than the details and how it all happened)

Thanks~!

EDIT: dashes seem to not work so I changed them to hyphens with spaces around them

As an anguished cry echoed from the distance through the emptied street, tears at last began to flow down her pallid cheeks. With sudden abandon, she wept bitterly, clutching shakily at her tormented heart.

Before, her features had been stern and vengeful as she had prepared the poisoned robes; her eyes had been dry as she had watched the Corinthians leave to witness the marriage, and her façade had been unwavering in its deception when she had presented the cursed wedding robes to Glauce, to whom her Jason had so readily pledged his faithless love. But at the sound of the distant cry - an echoing indication of Glauce's death, she lost her cold composure. Her sheer determination to murder Glauce had obscured her agony before, but after satiating her resolve for revenge, Medea now collapsed in grief, unable to forgive and forget Jason's betrayal.

Having discerned his planned treachery, Medea had confronted Jason and had painfully reminded him that without her, he could not have surmounted the challenges he faced in his quest for the Golden Fleece: the fire-breathing oxen, the warriors from the sown teeth of a dragon, and the dragon that guarded the Fleece itself. But even at the mention of her brother Apsyrtus, the bronze Talos, as well as Pelias and his daughters, Jason had derisively replied that it was not Medea but love that had helped him - a blinding love, planned and set by gods upon her. Love! What did he know of love when it was she who had betrayed her own people and killed for him? Through threatening tears, she had watched Jason abandon her and with tearing and furious heart, she had planned the retribution.

When the distant shouts soon changed into a clamor, Medea broke from her sorrowful daze. She stood uncertainly, and whispering to herself that a vengeance creates a pitiless cycle, she beckoned for her children. Her sons, Mermeros and Pheres, hesitantly came forward, not comprehending their mother's grieved expression and the blade in her hand. For a moment, Medea held her ill-fated children intimately against her bosom and then, with a stifled cry, she thrust the blade. Each stab she dealt, she felt in her own heart and her tears equaled their shed blood - blood that would no longer be cruelly spilled by the revenging Corinthians. Murmuring words of apologies, she embraced their lifeless bodies with her bloodied arms, and with her tears on their crimsoned faces, she placed her lips against their cold brows.

"Medea!"

At this vehement shout, she slowly turned to face him, but her grief - so evident before - had vanished from her dark eyes, now filled with pained hatred.
Liebe 1 / 542 2  
Jan 6, 2010   #2
The scoring system is based on accuracy

^Before i read on, what is 'accuracy' based on? What needs to be 'accurate'?
OP Envie 4 / 60  
Jan 6, 2010   #3
the story itself meaning the "plot" has to be the same as the myth.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 7, 2010   #4
dashes seem to not work so I changed them to hyphens with spaces around them

That is what I do, too -- and actually, I use two dashes.

H.G. Wells? I'm so excited to meet you...

Wow, after reading the first 2 sentences, I believe you are Wells, indeed. This is good stuff. Please consider being a Contributor here.

but after satiating her resolve for revenge, Medea now collapsed in grief, unable to forgive and forget Jason's betrayal.

You should write "after satiating her need for revenge," because I think we do not satiate resolve. Also, after the deaths of her children she was hurt not just by Jason's betrayal but also by feelings of guilt.

Hey, what is the deal, here? I thought you were supposed to tell a story fro her perspective? That means it should be told in the first person, as if you are her, right?

This seems like it would be better if written in the present verb tense, too.
OP Envie 4 / 60  
Jan 9, 2010   #5
Hmm Thanks! It's H. J, though... :o

And as for guilt, she hasn't killed them yet. That middle paragraph is like a flash-back in a way but I don't think I made that very clear...

I never thought about writing in first-person for some reason! I will try that and see how that goes.

Are you a recruiter? :-P I've seen you ask people to be a contributor hehe
rapoch 9 / 28  
Jan 12, 2010   #6
Dear Envie,

I am sorry if I sounded a bit rude; that was not my intention. I just like joking around. As for the word "Envie", I'd like to point out a couple of things. Your nickname is "Envie" not "En Vie". So, that can definitely be confusing. In addition, I do understand that "envie" does not mean "envy", however, they are indeed homophonous, and one could easily use "envie" to disguise the term "envy". Once again, it was not my intention to be ungracious and I would like to ask for your forgiveness. I am from Brazil and in our country we just love to fool around and make fun of people - never in a way that will hurt their feelings - but with the intention of making them laugh out loud with us. If I offended you, then I guess that I did not use my humor in a positive way and for that I am sorry. I am an easygoing person and sometimes I forget that others might take things too seriously. Sorry once again.

Hoping there is no hard feelings between us,
Raphael Portela
yang 2 / 313  
Jan 12, 2010   #7
rapoch
lol, funny, you've got 2 last names?

Envie
he's a MODERATOR, which is a self explanatory term. He's "recruiting" you cuz he sees you have very strong writing abilities and would love that you join our ranks. Contributors are nothing more than students/nice people who are dedicated in helping others, so becoming a contributor will (hopefully) make you edit more people's essays.

At least, that's how I saw it.
OP Envie 4 / 60  
Jan 14, 2010   #8
I know he's a Moderator... :o I can see that :-P I just wondered whether his "unofficial job" was to go around recruiting, that's all.

But, I don't think I will be good enough so I won't apply...yet ^_^
yang 2 / 313  
Jan 14, 2010   #9
But, I don't think I will be good enough so I won't apply...yet ^_^

haha don't say that. I highly doubt that I (i'll only speak for myself, if you know what i mean), an immigrant who came here only 2 years ago, am "qualified" to criticize many of the people who write a lot better than me. You story telling skills, for instance, is far far superior than my own. However, I don't think that this has prevented me from helping others because you really don't have to be a better writer to criticize others' essays. It's more about a different perspective and the expertise that only YOU have.

As I said, becoming a contributor doesn't make you superior; therefore, you don't have to be superior to become a contributor.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 15, 2010   #10
But, I don't think I will be good enough so I won't apply...yet ^_^

Oh, ha ha... yeah, contributing is not really so much about being a skilled writer or knowledgeable grammarian... It's being part of a writer's group. When we write, we can't know how what we are writing seems to other people... so we need other people to really spend a few quality moments with what we write and give us feedback.

And nobody has to really apply to be a contributor. I think it's just that after you help with a certain number of essays you can send a message to be established as a contributor, and it is something impressive to put in your list of activities or on a resume.

The contributors here always seem to be cool people. I recruit them because they help me make sure everyone who posts an essay gets some help! hahaha


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