Several years ago, I had no health insurance and neither did many of those around me.
Several years ago, I did not have any health insurance and so did my friends.Several years ago, I had no health insurance and neither did many of those around me. This is what initially prompted to inquire about nutrition and other self healing modalities. It was not long before I was fully engaged in researching and studying whatever I could get my hands on about mind/body medicine.
.... The link is pretty weak between the first line and the second or third. The reader tends to wonder why you talked about insurance because it does not have any reference to rest of the paragraph.
In pursuit of my education, I plan to incorporate academic projects that will greatly impact not only my studies but also my skills as a coach.
In pursuit of my studies, I intend to incorporate academic projects that have a significant influence on my studies as well as my skills as a coach.To explore ways of doing this, I will do an internship at a local shelter where I will offer my coaching services.
This internship is important to my education because by providing support to those in need I will gain invaluable interpersonal skills and get credits for school.
This internship is very important for my educational exposure because by providing support I would be more confident while gaining invaluable interpersonal skills.