wasam the most excited person
Don't think this is a good statement to open the paragraph with. Write something more catchy.
. In my life I always want to try something new
---> I have always tried to experience new things
This program will
get me ableenable me to getachieve more experiences so I am able to expose myself to be internationally-minded person and expanding my relation to many other countries around the world and learn more about different/various many cultures .
Although this program fields - early childhood education- is not suitable to my past education background ,
but I have so much to learn from my social activities.
I recommend you to delete this sentence. Just try to introduce yourself as a suitable person for this program. How the social activities could prepare you for this program (focus on this issue)
I'veI have (do not use contractions) realized that children should be given quality education should be provided for children from the beginning, n ot only a formal education but also a moral education SoThus, I wanteddecided to dedicate myself to helping children's education and contribute more to the society by being a bridge that can share information and knowledge about early childhood education from various countries. Understand intercultural communication and international education experience(connect this sentence to the previous one by using a transition) . My dream/goal is I want to improve early childhood education in Indonesia, working at an international company for early childhood education (what did you try to say?) , positioned for contributing my ideas trough child development, or build a social child education foundation is what I expectedeagerly seek to do in mythe future. I would be very appreciativeappreciate if you would give me an and thankful that I was given the opportunity will be givento pursue my goals by accepting my request for being a part of the community college initiative program to help fulfill my dream.
hope this helps,