Please give an honest advice for my networking skills essay:
Chevening is looking for individuals with strong networking skills, who will engage with the Chevening community and influence and lead others in their chosen profession. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your networking skills, and outline how you hope to use these skills in the future.
(minimum word count: 100 words, maximum word count: 500 words)
large network with other international students
It was after observing my friend got his first project in his first year of university that I realize how important networking skills are to life. It motivates me to hone my networking skills whenever possible.
My first real job is the result of an unexpected help from my church member. There's this friend of my mom, and from our conversation, she realizes I applied to one of her friend's company. All the sudden she took out her phone and got me an interview the day after, and I got the job with a good paygrade for a fresh architect graduate.
It was also by networking that I got my first side job as an architect. At first, I just make friend with one of my university students, and from our conversation he learned that I am an architect, and straightaway offers me a job. It was a simple 3d drafter project, but I keep up with my work and it took me to even more jobs from her.
I tried to keep a good relationship with my CEO because she is one of those people that actually lead and taught people and not just bossing around. I learned a lot of how to keep up a good relationship with people from her. I practiced what she taught me and it got me into a good relationship with our client. Right now, this client wants me to be the only people other than my CEO in my company to be the contact person to our company and I hope to keep up with this.
I know that my CEO have a good connection with many people from the business and political world. I'm hoping that with this good relationship that I have with her, it will open up my way to a better future in my job. In the future, I really want to be a government employee. I know that entering a governmental department will be hard, and I hope that with this relation that I have will help me to get a referral into it.
During my time in Chevening program, I wish to create a larger network with other international students. I fully understand that this is the era of globalization and with a better network came a better chance for me to strive as a professional.
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Alvin, this essay that you created only details how you learned how to develop and use a professional network. It does not indicate how you currently create, develop, enhance, and cultivate your scholarship network. By a scholarship network, I refer to the people that you meet in a professional situation outside of the office. The network cannot relate to a co-worker, an immediate supervisor, or someone within the company that introduces you to someone else. A professional network is developed through work necessity or skills development. Your essay does not really portray that you have that ability because you are focused on how other people develop their networks as per your observation. This is not an essay that you can use for this prompt. You need to write a totally new one that indicates what your current professional network consists of, how you use it, if it has led you to create additional networks, and why these networks you have created will offer Chevening an enhanced network of their own. Prove those points and you will have an essay that addressed the prompt requirements in an accurate manner.