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One day I'll go back to my war-torn country Syria - country that needs real leaders and action doers


Medo91 4 / 10 3  
Oct 31, 2016   #1
the clock is ticking is coming, shall go i with these essays !:)

Chevening is looking for individuals that will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer.

Leadership has been always a word that comprises wide notions and pivotal standards by which humanity evolves and leaders inspire future generations and influence them to the road of prosperity.

To be a successful leader or to earn this stature in the first place, you have to acquire certain skills that enable you to act and behave according to this position.

I think and my thoughts pertain to my previous situations where I experienced leadership positions, that the first skill helped me to proceed with other members and gain their trust is strong ethics and morals and my persisting inner stimulus to keep me attached to these values. With such values, I can create an environment of mutual trust and commitment to fairness and equity among my team. To be more specific about these general aspects, when I say the word fair; I avoid every single factor that might be the reason to take a decision on someone while this factor has nothing to do with a person's assessment or qualification and the first factor to mention is people from other religions or ethnicity.

The second skill that I like to apply especially in serious situations is sharing the responsibility among my team, though it does not display me as helpless or incapable of solving the problem, it allows the team to be more productive and unleashes their potential for creativity. This works as an empowerment and encouragement for teams to be more proactive and makes them feel that they are the keystone of this entity and without their contribution, a mission can never be accomplished. In the same time, I think that such kinds of skills and initiatives enable employees to feel secure in their workplace and consider it as a confirmation of belonging to where they work.

Last but not least, I followed a personal style that characterized me with a positive attitude; this was my secret to keep my team motivated towards the continued success of our company and keep the energy levels up. I try to undertake all kinds of initiatives with my team whether it means to have a snack together, a cup of coffee or asking a simple question about their life outside the office without invading their privacy, at the end, we are social species. By doing this again and again I found out that my good relationship with a team member was the reason for him/her to stay that extra half an hour to complete a report for example. In other words, it was not just a matter of duties and rights, it was about giving due to satisfaction.

One day I will go back to my war-torn country Syria, a country that needs real leaders and action doers who will always be ready to start initiatives seeking society reformation, a country that is urgently looking for influencers capable of disseminating morals and ethics. I see myself standing among these leaders and I see that day is coming soon.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,529 3444  
Oct 31, 2016   #2
Mamdouh, don't go with this essay. It lacks content that is required by the prompt. Develop it further first then devise and edit it before you considering submitting it. You have really developed a very interesting essay and it shows that you know exactly the kind of leader that you wish to be int he future. The problem is that you have concentrated way too much on the hypothetical side of leadership. The essay prompt asks you to balance the hypothetical discussion with experience from your real life. There is a lack of solid evidence through example from personal experience regarding leadership and influencing skills on your part. Sure you presented overview statements of your experience, that should be sufficient enough for the response right? Not really.

Chevening is known of producing future leaders that can lead their countries out of their troubled times. Therefore, they need to know that you will be able to do that through a series of examples related to your professional or volunteer work. All you have done at the moment is imply that you know how to lead and what to expect when you try to influence people under you. There is no clear example of the success that you have had with regards to this idea. The examples are necessary to create a more believable essay on your part.
OP Medo91 4 / 10 3  
Nov 2, 2016   #3
@Holt, I have considered your last comment very deeply and revised the whole essay, take a look please

My first experience of leadership position started by WhatsApp message from the company owner I used to be working for as a medical consultant, he typed 'would like to be hospital sales manager'. The overwhelming feeling of exhilaration to obtain such a position was overcome by the enormous responsibilities assigned to me.

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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,529 3444  
Nov 3, 2016   #4
Fantastic turnabout! I can't believe that this was written by the same Medo who made the same mistakes in the previous version. This is definitely the work of a man who not only analyzed the prompt, but ensured that he would be presenting himself in the best light as a leader and influential figure at his workplace. I am reading the essay again in disbelief.

The only critique that I have for your essay is that you did not delve into the reasons as to why your boss believed that you would be the best man for this leadership position. I believe that if you can convince the reviewer that your boss saw certain skills in you as a potential leader, then the rest of the story that you are sharing will be more believable and acceptable to him.

Try to work a little more on the revision I am suggesting. I believe that it will make the essay even stronger than it is at the moment and should be ready for use once we have completed the final reading.


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