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Outline why you have selected your chosen courses and how this relates to your plans for the future

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Aug 13, 2016   #1
Outline why you have selected your chosen three university courses, and explain how this relates to your previous academic or professional experience and your plans for the future.*Please do not duplicate the information you have entered on the work experience and education section of this form (minimum word count: 50 words, maximum word count: 500 words)

It is such of the reason why I choose UK for my master degree. As I know UK is the center of world civilization and a lot of reputable university taken place there, such as Oxford, Cambridge, and so on. It proves UK has been great civilization since in the past. Thus, it could be a reason why I take the Chevening program which gives scholarship to study in UK especially for master degree. I propose to take the program at 3 universities. They are university of Birmingham, Swansea university, and university of Wales Trinity Saint David. Those are universities which have program I mention.

My bachelor background is English for education therefore I propose to take teaching English as foreign language TEFL for master degree. It is such as linearity for the previous study background. It completely supports for my work as English teacher, interpreter, and translator. I want to emphasize the subjects previously about English for Education. I am very keen to expand my knowledge about teaching and learning that I can use it to devote to my city living after I finish my degree for improving and developing the education system.

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Aug 13, 2016   #2
Hi Yusuf. Welcome to Essay Forum!

I've read your essay a few times now, and I must say I don't think you are really devoting the proper amount of space to the prompt as you should be. You spend half of your essay explaining why you chose the UK and Chevening, which are not necessary at all. These are just taking up space in your essay that you could be using to answer the prompt. Only the last three sentences of your first paragraph are really necessary, and I think that might be a good place to start your essay.

Your last paragraph is really where you get to the important things that answer the prompt. However, your sentences are a little too complex with large words that make it almost hard to understand. Try using words that are easier to understand and simpler sentences to make your meaning more clear to the reader.

Also, I'd suggest writing more. You have up to 500 words, so why not use all of that space?

Take care!

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