Passing on the knowledge - SOP Future Plan for KGSP scholarship.

Hello, this is my last essay required to apply for the KGSP.
I had some troubles with this one even though I thought it was going to be the easiest,so I would really appreciate some feedback on this!

Future plan in Korea or another country after study in Korea

my aspirations

Upon completion of my studies in Korea I plan to stay in Korea in order to take the Korean medical licensing examination. This would be my first step towards my next goal, which is to do my residency in Korea. I would like to spend my years as a resident in the hospital of the university where I graduated from, to learn first hand how to become a specialist in the field from the very same people who taught me during my master 's years to implement what I learnt during that time.

Even after my residency is over I do not plan to stop studying or researching, as it is something that I aspire to do for my whole life. I in fact plan to do a PhD once my residency will be over. I would like my research to be a joint work with the psychiatry department, in order to study how a combined approach between psychiatrists and plastic surgeons could be useful in the cure of pathologies such as body dysmorphic disorder. This would also be a way for me to contribute to the University where I studied as I would like to do my PhD there as well.

Because I always thought that one of the most important things that we can do as professionals is to contribute in the development of the future medical class, I would like to work in a university hospital at the end of my PhD. Being an extremely curious person I do not only tend to always learn new things, but I also enjoy passing the knowledge to other people as I believe that one can have a gain by knowing something only by spreading it to others. From this belief originates my ambition to teach to medical students what I've learnt in the past and what I will be learning in the future. I would like to remain in Korea also during this time as it would mean a lot to me to have the possibility to train the future medical class of a country that helped me so much in becoming the kind of doctor and of person that I aspired to be.

Fabiola, the post study plan for the KGSP program should cover the first 5 years of your career post graduate. Therefore, you should not be discussing your PhD as the focal point of this essay. Rather, you should be indicating the PhD studies as the next phase of your educational development at the end of the essay.

The essay needs to have you indicate a desire to work in Korea for a few years but not a desire to stay in Korea. All of the post study plans require that you go back to your home country after a few years to share the knowledge and expertise that you gained during your studies and professional career in Korea. You should modify the essay to reflect that.

A PhD is normally undertaken within a decade after your masters studies. Therefore, that sort of detailed discussion is not warranted in this essay. Instead, mention what kind of career you hope to have upon your return home and that you look forward to going to Korea after some time in order to continue with your medical training as PhD student.

Focus the essay on achievable, professional post study goals. The medical license exam in Korea is a logical part of the plan since you cannot practice your profession in Korea without it. The PhD education, that is not something that you can immediately undertake upon graduation and requires a different set of preparations so do not include a detailed discussion of that here. You are not applying to PhD school yet.