Unanswered [3] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Scholarship   % width Posts: 4

"People who live in simplicity vs. results" - scholarship introduction essay


syikkin 1 / 1  
Apr 7, 2010   #1
please help me by correcting any errors in this petite introduction...

Not necessarily, people who live in simplicity will only bring out some ordinary results.
Notoman 20 / 419  
Apr 7, 2010   #2
Honestly? I am not sure what you are trying to say here.

People who live simply sometimes experience extraordinary results.

A simple life will result in an ordinary outcome.

There are words in the sentence that make it more difficult to know what you are trying to say ... "not necessarily" conveys that the situation is not always true (but may be), "will only" says that there is only one outcome, but "some" indicates that this is true only some of the time.

Look at the sentence with a few words changed to see what I mean:
Not necessarily, people who eat candy will only get fat.

Are you saying that living in simplicity is a good thing with a good end result or that it is a bad thing that will not challenge a person and cause growth?
OP syikkin 1 / 1  
Apr 7, 2010   #3
how about this...

"It is not always true that people who live in simplicity will produce a simple result in their exam.Sometimes, those people are able to achieve a better result than the person who live in luxury."

are these sentences related??
are those good sentences??
please correct me...
thanks..
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 8, 2010   #4
Not necessarily, people who live in simplicity will only bring out some ordinary results.

Yeah, I was thinking this meant: People who live in simplicity do not necessarily bring about simple results.

I am thinking the same way as Notoman

"It is not always true that people who live in simplicity will produce a simple result during their exams. Sometimes, those people are able to achieve a better result than the people who live in luxury."

Oh, I see what you are saying!!
Sometimes, people who live in luxury have an advantage and can enjoy the finest instruction that money can buy, but they will not necessarily score better on their exams. Sometimes people who live simply and study hard can become more knowledgeable.


Home / Scholarship / "People who live in simplicity vs. results" - scholarship introduction essay