To help me accomplish my duty
Give up to three practical examples of how you intend to use the knowledge, skills and connections you will gain from your scholarship. Possible tasks can be personal and/or professional; and
b) list any possible constraints you think may prevent you from achieving these tasks.*:
The knowledge, skills, and connections I will be gaining would help me accomplish my duty in various ways. First, the training can assist my research in the professional field, which is crucial in making any recommendation for working in one of the Palestinian authority departments, by enabling one of the fundamental characteristics that Palestine lacks which is entrepreneurship and innovation.
Secondly, by sharpening my skills in leadership, critical and creative thinking, and problem-solving, I hope to influence and lead the young generation, departments in private and public sectors. To inspire, motivate them on the spirit of entrepreneurship and innovation. Also, to provide them with enough capacities to address challenges innovatively . Finally, becoming a member of international experts, academics, and the Australia Awards Scholars network will allow me to get professional advice and any assistance opportunities in the before-mentioned field. For instance, I would have information about market-feasible technologies via the network, then, apply them to the Palestinian Political Field
Many Palestinian officials in innovation are by far the first challenge in introducing innovation and development to the Palestinian official sectors, The traditional approach in management is becoming an old trend that needs to be changed and enhanced by a younger generation. Unfortunately, the " old management" style is rooted and hard to change.
Another obstacle comes from the inefficient policy framework for Innovation. For example, the lack of information about entrepreneurship departments that the public sector is suffering from is affecting the amounts of funds given to this department.
Lastly, the lack of organizing innovation is a huge challenge. For instance, many innovations results from government-funded projects are difficult to translate into the market because there are no professionals to implement it.
of course this is a not bad essay. But I found some of the point missing in this essay
1. in your first paragraph, what I see is that you need to deliver a detail explaining of your desire of contributing.
2. in your second paragraph, explain them how would you motivate them : your idea and your process
I found this two as a main pt to change.
Thank You, the problem is I should only write Up to 2000 Character which is not enough.
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I do not really see you presenting any actual applications for your newly gained skills and connections in the essay. Neither do you present any actual problems in relation to the programs you would want to enact in the future in your country. You should be more specific in your presentation. You should present, in every paragraph:
- The skill you will gain
- The application and why it is important to your country / profession
- What obstacle you might come across and how you will solve this situation
Do this 3 times then present the explanation of how the network will help you with your projects and also, include a reference to how you will promote the network in your country. The network should be the last paragraph. Since you have only 2000 characters to work with, you will need to go 500 characters per paragraph. So keep it short. Be direct in your discussion presentation. Do not try to over inform or over explain. Just state the facts in the shortest way you can. If you find it difficult to do that, then you should consider hiring a professional editor to help you accomplish the statement response.
At first, I think you need to be more practical. The skills and knowledge that you gain from scholarship should be demonstrated well. Visioning idea does not work. We cannot change anything in overnight. I think given the skills you have after scholarship, provided by the support in the country like networks, organizations you work with and your academia, you have to resolve a problem through practical work. For example:
If you want to conduct a research in the field, try to think what skills you gain to develop your research work, think about what resources and networks are available.
Hope it works.