Set out the skills and attributes you possess that will enable you to develop as a leader

Hello, this essay is 3/5 assessment criterion for Endeavour Leadership Program Australia. I would be very glad if anyone can give me some feedback or corrections. Thank you very much in advance.

Regards,
Dininta

DEVELOPMENT OF LEADERSHIP SKILLS.
Set out the skills and attributes you possess that will enable you to use this opportunity to develop as a leader in your field.
Explain how the proposed activity will develop your leadership skills and build on your ability to contribute to your study, training, research or professional field on your return to your home country.

My leadership skill in information technology field has been built ever since the first year of my undergraduate study. One of my very first taste of leadership experience was when I got assigned as the group leader in multiple course projects. Every time I was handed the responsibility, I always focused on managing equal division of tasks according to the skill of each member.

In fourth semester, I formed and led a study group consisted of some of my classmates that aims to gain more knowledge and skills outside classes by competing in numerous regional and national IT competitions. All hard works and failures that we endured along the years were paid off when we won the National Hackathon in 8th Annual Computer Festival by Universitas Indonesia. Afterwards, I decided to extend my leadership skill through teaching experience, hence in 2017 I became the laboratory assistant of Visual Programming course for second year diploma students. My competition and teaching experiences have shaped the fundamental skills and attributes inside me to become a future leader in my field. I learned a great deal about people management, determination, programming skills beyond ones that were taught in classes, even personal and emotional control.

Upon returning to Indonesia, I plan to launch a successful career in a national IT company before finally serving back to teach in my alma mater, Universitas Sriwijaya. I believe that conducting my proposed activity in University of Technology Sydney through the Endeavour Leadership Program will bring me to a whole another level of leadership experience because I will be faced with a different and a more competitive environment. I am confident that the ideas and cultural exchange which I will gain by learning and interacting among diverse and highly determined international students will assist me to achieve my goal.

Dininta, you are not offering an impressive leadership essay here. You are focused on your academic leadership when all the other applicants will have at least 2 years of actual professional leadership skills to speak of in their essays. You are speaking of highly academic leadership skills that the reviewer will not be convinced that you have what it takes to professionally develop as a leader in this field. Balance the presentation between the foundation of your academic leadership with your professional leadership.

You need to use more profession based leadership examples in order to improve your chances for consideration. By proving that you have performed leadership roles within your profession / line of work, you will be able to show evidence of having the potential to continue to grow as a leader during your time of study as you will be combining your professional and academic leadership skills whenever called upon to do so during this study period.