Describe your participation in extracurricular activities.
What have you learned from your experience(s)?
(Examples may include: community service, volunteer work, employment, school clubs, sports, family, church, etc.)
Since enrolling in college most of my time for extracurricular activities has gone to working to pay for my tuition. Any involving volunteer work was mostly done when I was in high school. However, I was able to join an organization last spring semester, the Society of Physics Students, at the school I currently attend, The University of Texas at San Antonio. I have kept up with meetings since then, and love being surrounded with other students that are also majoring in physics. Each of these different activities has taught me different things that have been beneficial.
The first job I acquired was my junior year in high school. I started off at a local grocery store and since then have worked at Subway, Wal-Mart, and am now beginning my new job as an undergraduate research student assistant. Working and going to school at the same time can be very challenging but I needed to fund my education. One thing it has taught me is time management. As I have progressed in school, my classes have gotten more difficult and involve a great amount of homework. A job is no excuse not to get my academic work done so I began to schedule my time. I would attend school mostly during the day and begin homework and any reading I needed to get done in between classes. Then I would work mostly afternoons and weekends, so I made sure to start my homework days before it was due to finish on time. Now that I am beginning a job on campus, I should have more time to get any schoolwork done during the weekend but am responsible enough to not procrastinate. Although, work has taken up so much time, I still wanted to be involved in some type of college organization.
I went ahead and joined the Society of Physics Students and have really enjoyed it. There aren't many Physics majors so it only consists of about twenty students. However, that makes the club even better because we are all able to know each other well. The activities we do within the club are setting up different Physics seminars and lunches every Friday with speakers that are working in the physics field, we also come up with different ways to raise money for the organization to go on different trips through out the year, and perform small science projects. Being a part of the organization has greatly improved my people skills and taken me even further in my knowledge of physics. I have learned a lot from the different speakers and various job fields that are open to physics majors. One of my favorites has to be when I met Sir Roger Penrose, a mathematician and physicists currently working on theoretical work in cosmology. Which is the direction I want to take my career in when I begin my research.
Both working and being a part of the Society of Physics Students, have impacted me in different ways. Through work I was able to understand that managing time is very important, especially as you get older. Then by being a part of a club on campus I learned how to interact better with students and enhance my knowledge of physics. These experiences have helped me become more mature.
I will return the favor! Thanks! :)
There are some sentences that have the wrong comma usage. For example, "Working and going to school at the same time can be very challenging but I needed to fund my education." should have a comma before "but". Also the last sentence of the first paragraph that starts with "Although, work has taken up so much time, I still wanted to be involved in some type of college organization." you should take erase the comma after the word although. Last thing is that you should change the beginning of some sentences, there is a few that start with "I have", so try to change around the beginning of sentences to make it more interesting. Other than that good job, and good luck!
Yeah, like maria said a lot of bad comma usage, whether it be a comma where it shouldn't be or no comma where it should be. Also a lot of choppy short sentences that I would combine. Otherwise look OK.
Since enrolling in college most of my time for extracurricular activities has gone to working to pay for my tuition.
... This is a very confusing sentence. You have to rephrase this as it does not convey any clear idea :(
Any involving volunteer work was mostly done when I was in high school.
... this one too is pretty confusing :(
My suggestion is to start with your participation in that club. Other facts (which you have not properly expressed) seem to be irrelevant for this question. Concentrate more on your role in that club and telling them that experience. What role you played there, what experience you gained and what you learned out of it.
