Giving me the opportunity to live and grow as a person in a country where Spanish and American traditions merge to make of it an unique and amazing place to live in, was one of the best things my parents could have ever done for me. While living in Puerto Rico, I not only have the joy of learning to speak two of the most widely spoken languages in the world: English and Spanish, but also to live surrounded by two different cultures. Here I can truly say I am living the best of both worlds. However, I feel the need to expand my knowledge and learn more about these two fascinating cultures that are part of my everyday life.
When I was twelve, I asked my parents If we could move to the state of Florida. I recall telling them, with the innocence and simplicity of a child, that I wanted to have a new experience and learn how it was to live life there. Those words did not mean much at that time, but after having lived in Florida for six years, I can now say it has been one of the greatest ideas I ever had. It gave me a chance to explore the American folklore. When I now celebrate Martin Luther King's day and the fourth of July, I can truly understand why so many Americans celebrate it with such pride and patriotism.
After six years in Florida I am back in Puerto Rico, this time as a matured college student. As I take different courses at my university, I keep hearing the same complains from professors; my generation is forgetting about the traditions and language our ancestors left us years ago. Anglicisms are becoming very popular among young Puerto Ricans, and I fear of making the same unforgivable mistakes as them. Spanish is a beautiful and romantic language when spoken correctly, it will be a shame if I do not try to improve my Spanish proficiency by studying abroad in Spain. This is why I know a semester abroad in Spain is what I need to gain consciousness of those mistakes. Spain is a very sophisticated country. It's historical and cultural monuments and its geographic position make Spain tourism industry the second-biggest(is this okay)? in the world. I do not know how can one hesitate and deny (themself, himself i don't know which one to use) from the experience of studying abroad in such an amazing country.
Even though I am aware that my country shares a deep history and traditions with Spain, the roots of this traditions are a mystery to me. Now that I know more about american traditions, I also want to be able to understand Spanish traditions. Spain is the only place where I am going to be able to understand the origin of those traditions. However, I am not twelve anymore and I cannot ask my parents to pay for my study abroad experience. This is why for the past two years I have been working and selling home made craft to save money and defray my study abroad expenses. The impact that receiving the Scholarship will have in my life is one that I cannot explain in words, the images on my Follow-on Project will say more than a thousand words. They will tell how the scholarship is more than just a grant to me, it's the foundation to the wonderful experience I hope to have abroad. This adventure is going to change my life forever. I know that this experience is vital to acquire new knowledge and it will enrich me in a personal and professional level.
Studying abroad will also help me understand how my profession is embrace in other parts of the world. My major is Biological Science, and although many of my fellow classmates have warned me about the challenges I might face when selecting my coursework in Spain, I am convinced that I will make everything work out. Many students in my major tendnot to or to not? study abroad, but I intend to be the exception. However, in order to be able to have the experience of studying abroad without jeopardizing my science major, I decided it was best for me to study one semester abroad instead of a whole year. I plan to study in the Complutense University of Madrid because it offers electives that my university does not offer. I am going to make sure that those electives I take in Madrid have an impact on me, in a personal and academical level. I am curious on how experiments are conducted in Spain and If they take in consideration the same bioethical issues that we take here in the United States. In addition, I will like to see what technology is available in Spain that might not be available in my university.
The Complutense University of Madrid has a magnificent study abroad program. It is one of the five universities in Spain that received the Campus of International Excellence Award by the Spanish Ministry of Education and Science. This university is widely known around the world, and it will be a great privilege if I could have the experience to study there. I feel that not only the university will have an impact in my life, but also the residence where I will be staying. While living in the university residence, I am not only going to live surrounded by Spaniards, but I am also going to be able to meet people from all over the world. I hope to come back from Spain with a new perspective on the ideas and investigations that develop around the world.
Nowdays, it is difficult to imagine a successful person that has not traveled. Traveling gives you a new perspective in life, and a chance to explore the world while acquiring new knowledge and abilities. Living in a globalized society, and having had this type of experience will open a lot of opportunities in the professional aspect of my life. I know that I will never regret studying abroad. This might be a once in a lifetime opportunity and I do not want to miss it. As I write this, my mind is full of ideas and goals I wish to accomplish in Spain. I am confident that I am going to fulfil my family and professor's high expectations. The Baron International Scholarship effort to help students have an opportunity to study abroad will not be in vain. The adventures and knowledge I will gain in Spain are going to influence my life for ever. I wait anxiously for February 2011.
Is it any good? x.x I need some help with punctuation =) Thank You!
While living in Puerto Rico, I not only have the joy of learning to speak two of the most widely spoken languages in the world: (I think it's better to use a colon here) English and Spanish, but also to live surrounded by two different cultures.
and learn more about thisthese two fascinating cultures that are part of my everyday life.
When I was twelve, I asked my parents If we could move to the state of Florida.
Those words did not meantmean much at that time
W hen I now celebrate Martin Luther King's day and the fourth of July, I can truly say I understand why so many Americans...
After six years in Florida, I am back in Puerto Rico this time as a matured college student. As I take different courses at my university. I keep hearing the same complains from professors; (I thnk simicolon is good here) my generation is forgetting about the traditions and language our ancestors left us years ago.
Anglicism areis becoming very popular among young Puerto Ricans, and I fear I am of making the same unforgivable mistakes as them.
and deny themself (do you mean himself) from the experience
I know that this experience is vital to acquire new knowledge and it will enrich me in a personal and professional level.
program.they areIt is one of the five universities
In the university residence, I am not only going to live surrounded by Spaniards, but I am also going to
Nowadays, it is difficult to imagine a successful person that has not traveled . (use the past participle of the verb with has)
studying abroad.T his might be a once
As I write this, my mind is full of ideas
I hope this will help
Good Luck
Thank you! I really appreciate it =) I made the corrections and I added a couple of sentenses in the last 3 paragraphs. does it sound okay?
Giving me the opportunity to live and grow as a person in a country where Spanish and American traditions merge to make of it an unique and amazing place to live in, was one of the best things my parents could have ever done for me.
Is the sentence too long? I feel it's kind of long but I don't know how to fix it. Any ideas?
Hey thanks for the feedback,
In that sentence, I think you could cut out "Giving me the opportunity to live and grow as a person in a country where Spanish and American traditions merge to make of it an unique and amazing place to live in , was...", and perhaps switch unique and amazing so it flows better?
Great essay!
I do not know how one can hesitate and deny himself from the experience of studying abroad in such an amazing country.
I am not sure about this but I think tend not to study is better than tend to not study
Other members may help you more and answer your questions.
Good Luck.
Obviously it offers tremendous opportunities on the professional and academic level, and it embraces you from whatever culture you are to work equally as any citizen.
Thank you everyone! =) I really appreciate it. I still have the not to or to not study abroad question... :S
I am curious about how...
Traveling gives you instills a new...
Tend to not, tend not to, either is fine!!!
:-)
And the long sentence you asked about, I think the problem is some modifiers that do not help:
make of it an unique and amazing place ---- try replacing them with something specific. Unique and amazing just express energy without actually saying much.
