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STUDYING TO BETTER HEALTHCARE-CHEVENING COURSE CHOICE QUESTION


bilon 3 / 4  
Nov 4, 2017   #1
3)Outline why you have selected your chosen three university courses, and explain how this relates to your previous academic or professional experience and your plans for the future.

*Please do not duplicate the information you have entered on the work experience and education section of this form (minimum word count: 50 words, maximum word count: 500 words)


three courses for public sector physician



My years as a medical student and now a medical doctor have exposed me to several challenges plaguing the health sector of my country. My selected courses are all geared towards finding solutions to some of these challenges.

The health and public service management course at the University of South Wales is my first choice. This course fits within my objectives, with modules on leadership, public service management and innovation as well as research. Most importantly, lectures are dispensed by leaders in the public sector who also share their experiences in this sector. The Pontypridd campus where the course is dispensed is a quiet place and hence conducive for studies.

My second choice, at the University of Sheffield, is public health geared towards leadership and management. Apart from the fact that there is an excellent library, this course combines health management and health economics. This is will permit me understand the intricacies of financing the health sector.

My third course choice in on public health development. This course, offered by the London School of Hygiene and Tropical Medicine, is structured for low income countries like mine. It equips with skills needed to analyze the public health sector and design corrective measures to problems identified.

During medical training, I had several community medicine internships in rural areas as well as health campaigns organized by student associations. This introduced me to the functioning of public service health institutions and the health related difficulties faced by the communities they serve. I noticed that adequate healthcare was difficult to afford, but most importantly, hospitals were poorly equipped and managed.

As a public sector physician, I have had a forefront taste of some of the management challenges in public hospitals. Financial influx into the health system is low, but I have witnessed several instances where funds have been allocated to projects which do not contribute to innovation or amelioration of the quality of healthcare provided.

More so, most strategic positions in the public health sector are being held by people with little or no formal training in the management of health systems. Added to the centralized nature of this sector, decision making is slow and usually inappropriate to the actual problems faced on the field. I wish to better manage public health structures in my country, through adequate leadership, policy making and innovation. This prompted me to choose my selected courses. A Masters degree from one of the above high ranking universities will also serve as promotional material in my career.

In the future, I hope to get more involved in leadership and/or managerial positions which will permit me to contribute to the proper functioning of my country's healthcare system. Either of these courses will provide me with skills and knowledge to better diagnose the health sector and hence provide adequate solutions.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4773  
Nov 4, 2017   #2
Nzalie, would you consider revising the essay in a manner that better aligns your study goals with each course that you have chosen? The course you have chosen to study feel incomplete in presentation because it does not have an academic background, professional foundation, and forward thinking career goals attached to it. While I appreciate that you presented the whole essay in a paragraph format instead of an outline, the problem, is that you did not categorize your presentation to reflect its importance in relation to every course. So you need to address that situation in your revision. Each university and course should be grouped together with its own relation to your academic background, an example of your professional training in relation to the course, and your future career plan in relation to the completion of the MS course. Lengthen the course discussions and shorten your lengthy discussion. The discussion part should actually only cover 2 paragraphs. One is an academic summary and the other, is a professional summary. The rest of the information should be integrated into your university and course discussions.
fpl2017 2 / 3  
Nov 4, 2017   #3
Paragraph 2: don't repeat this sector.

Paragraph 3: permit me to. I would also suggest changing permit to allow. Also, paragraphs 3 and 4 both start with my [number] choice. Change that.

Paragraph 4: It equips students with the skills...

Paragraph 6: "...low, but I have also witnessed...innovation to the amelioration of...

Paragraph 7: Remove being from 'being held'. Adding to the centralized...and usually inconsequential to the...Remove the comma before 'through adequate...'

Paragraph 8: Any of these courses...with the skills and...
OP bilon 3 / 4  
Nov 5, 2017   #4
@Holt
Thanks for your input. I am already corrections on this. Do you think the discussion paragraphs should be put before the course paragraphs or after?

Thanks


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